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Lyrics With Killer Instinct

Postby Tash8 » Apr 16th, '07, 19:56

Hello,

This is my second audio named "Lyrics With Killer Instinct"

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My voice sounds weird cause I have a little bit of a sickness. This track all I tried to fix was listen to bar, and the other peoples criticism, I tried working on flow and energy and emotion, If I at the least bit improved those please let me know.

Please feed with constructive criticism only!

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Postby Tash8 » Apr 16th, '07, 22:41

bump
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Postby Nu Syd » Apr 16th, '07, 22:57

10mb?? :unsure:
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Postby $0 R3@L » Apr 16th, '07, 23:01

while you others suck dick, with N'SYNC


this line was too eminem for my liking.Its lil things like this people are gonna call you a eminem wanna be /groupie.No hate but people will pick up on this.You gotta snap outta eminem mode and create your own.

Beat was erm ok but just dont think it fits your voice atm.

Hook was ok but no emotion and you need someone to mix it with overlays.

Your first verse drops on the beat totally out of time.You sound like your reading too much.You need to sit and learn the lyrics from memory rather then paper.Lyrics were okish.

Just work on it and keep trying.
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Postby B.A.D. » Apr 16th, '07, 23:02

typing while listening:

THE FILE IS TOO BIG!!!!!

the beat is cool

I couldn't listen to the whole song cuz the file is to big to keep downloading

but the singing in the begining is not good... whus up with your mic
the lyrics are fine.. but you sound like whispering...

if you get a better mic, and put more emotion to it.. you will sound very good..

to be truth, you lost the few too much.... keep practicing freestyles on beats,,, :worship:

yo, if you got the time download my tape there is one topic I just bumped to the top called "Pain in my words lp"... thnx in advance
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 16th, '07, 23:07

Yea I dont know why the file is that big, i really have no idea..
and they nysnc line i didn't try to copy eminem it just rhymed lol ;)

my mic is really bad and my voice like i said sounded weird today cause i'm a bit sick.

and i'll d/l your tape later, I'm busy with some stuff right now

thanks for the feed
more please
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Postby Hadez » Apr 16th, '07, 23:08

$0 R3@L wrote:
Your first verse drops on the beat totally out of time.You sound like your reading too much.You need to sit and learn the lyrics from memory rather then paper

i agree, you should know the words before you record'em... if you wanna keep the paper in front of you in case you forget i think that'd be fine.
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 16th, '07, 23:11

^^ that's what i do.
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 17th, '07, 06:11

more feeds plz
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Postby randomghost » Apr 17th, '07, 06:17

firts of all tash this file is so big u have to resize it using mixcraft program or audio mixer, etc., 2nd man u need to speak ot when are whsipering, is anybody sleeping in da hosue and u dont want to do any voice??try to put more emotions and when u write a song? u have ur rhymes wid the drums or bass of the beat, coz it sounds like u are speaking to someone, keep on tryin man, wish u luck, just hear the drums of the beat how it goes and try to fit the words, and speak ot, not to shout but to use ur voice as u are singing not speaking, peace
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 17th, '07, 06:28

lol no i'm not whispering, i just hold the mic far away cuz that's what someone told me to do and then just amplify it.

I don't know why the file is so big it's never been that big before.

People keep saying emotion but i don't get what they mean lol

I wrote the lyrics before I found the beat so I tried my best to have it match but really couldn't..
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Postby randomghost » Apr 17th, '07, 06:34

Tash8 wrote:lol no i'm not whispering, i just hold the mic far away cuz that's what someone told me to do and then just amplify it.

I don't know why the file is so big it's never been that big before.

People keep saying emotion but i don't get what they mean lol

I wrote the lyrics before I found the beat so I tried my best to have it match but really couldn't..
emotions is when u sing u have to sound like u are really saying this words from ur heart,( u know what i mean?) like spitting out from vocal in ur voice, when u sing u have to give 110% of ur voice , coz emotions is like energy of ur voice that u speak it out... and for the resizing u can use a lot of programs, mixcraft, audio mixer etc. if u need any help pm me :happy: and also u have to listen to the beat so that u can write a song, u cant write a song before listening to the beat (DATS WRONG), if u wrote the words before u get the beat and it didnt match, thne keep it for future use and concentrate on the beat and match the beat wid some rhyme byt remember u have to sing and match the drums, peace
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Postby Hadez » Apr 17th, '07, 06:36

Tash8 wrote:
People keep saying emotion but i don't get what they mean lol

do it like you mean it kinda thing. how does the song make you feel? cuz right now it sounds like an obligation, like reading a report in front of the class.
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 17th, '07, 06:47

alright i'll try that

random, do you think you can help me out with the beat thing please? cause i'm really bad at the mixing stuff
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Postby randomghost » Apr 17th, '07, 08:41

Tash8 wrote:alright i'll try that

random, do you think you can help me out with the beat thing please? cause i'm really bad at the mixing stuff
aight ma no problem, just try to make ur rhyme and word fits wid the drums or the beat, like here is an example of a drums:

ding dan tak, : da din dan tak (now see how i will fit ma rhymes)
(i rap quick snap, : fast quick to blast) see u just have to fit the word dependin on the drums u hearing on the beat, when u need anything tell me and i will help u, even when u mix, etc... what program u use for mixing???
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