New Track, I'm A Fighter(Produced By mart85) + Info

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Info

Ok, as of now i wont be releasing a Mixtape, the tracks i had for it will be releasing casualy over the coming months, each track is me practicing different style and different things so i beg of you all be 200% critical, i need to sort my sound out and cant do it without getting told were im goin wrong. After i get the feed from all these track i will sort my sound and style out and then go to work on the LP i planned, witch already has some tracks that are above my usual standard witch is why they wont be released along with this batch of track (plus they aint all finished)


The Track

Bar - I'm A Fighter(Produced by mart85)

Couldnt think of a name so we took the name from the samples in it (from rocky), the track is me practicing new style of flow and new style of lyrics so no real concept

Link To Track - http://www.myspace.com/baruwc


Lyrics - may be slightly different in audio, i change stuff just before recording

Verse1
yo, yo, yo, when a step up rappers flee like im a bin man
look there's not a rapper to see rap you'll never be that
im miracle man like the one hand clap i slap that
straight back with the weight back dont waist that punch
you'll never taste that crunch like kellogs but you just fell of
with beat uh, uh , uh yo mart mart bring the beat back now
everybody jumping when i spit in this place
i got the whole street bumpin with the sick lyric taste
and i spit at this pace im on a different beat every week
old tar new tar put it together you got the bar
im a scottish rapper without the typical tone
n no doubt in the lyrical zone infact the miracles on
on is the miracle and i challenge to spit at any fool

Chorus
so im gonni take it to you right now
i will tkae anyone who wanne try fight now
its what i do its who i am its what i be
coz i got to

Verse2
look everybodie saying how hip hops dead
thinking if you say it in a track you slept in bed
get on the beat n prove something do something
gangsta rap your thing well fucking shoot somehting
the games got to many fakes i knew that in the first take
copying the same styles so i say man fuck the mainstream
its like a pain dream or should i say nightmare your right there
delivery the deliverence delibretely no ?
forever make a difference to-the-liberal flow i aint typical no
im like a time machine ya see i ryhme this mean on a new school beat
then i take it back to the funky tip top heat then i rip some old school meat
i never lie or cheat
ill make it through hardwork dedication n pride thats something you can never beat


Verse3
i aint a real rapper i just rip beats as a past time
got me hooked i dont think they'll ever be a last time
n when it sound like the last line a new track drops n its blast time
all over again my hands glued to this pen n if a spit ten i rip them
spit 16 make sure there mean or 2 4 6 8 i spit them all
never deliver the flow late, deflaite a rapper if he think flying high
but he ryhming shy never flow fly his punches low sly what i call sublimel
and he claims he's from the street but he went to spain got scared from the heat
n thats real talk the real never walk we run lifes to short so live lke you got
a barrel of a gun shooting up your ass crack i cant afford to ever rap wack again

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

haha i like that feel to that track funny
yea...its definitly somthin new...but i like it..
new up wind hehe...good job guys

but the chorus was weird

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[Xray]

thats one crazy mafucken track bro
beat is crazyismo
verse 1 perfecto flow is tightiyo
chorus was somfin newiyo but very craziyo love the mixing martiO
verse 2 couldnt be better perfecto amigo
verse 3 outragousiyo but loved it amigo

overalla (very crazy and perfecto) *talks wid italin accent*

thank you my amigo chrisiEso realy appreciatiO by the way yallO checko for New single-O calledO bounceO aiitO peaceO

[mart85]

lol yeah, blame me if you don't like the chorus ...we both like the Rocky movies and I had the idea of adding quotes from the movies for the chorus, so I showed it to Bar and he accepted and then filled it with some lines here and there... I can understand that some may think it's weird, but personally I like it lol you gotta try new things once in a while

[B.A.D.]

bar, can u zshare it 4 me

I can't get into myspace

[$0 R3@L]

hmmm...

to me it sounds like your tryna attempt old school which is pretty hard to master.The beat isnt per say 'old school'...i aint sure if this is what you was going for so that by and by.

The first verse was pretty decent,some points you had too many words per bar and slipped of the beat slighty,nothing major but is noticable.

Second verse again at points you had too many words per bar and slipped,like for example when the beat breaks down the flow gets sloppy...aint too sure what to suggest...hmmm...good verse though pretty solid lyrics at points.

Third verse is ok and yet again your struggling to stay on beat from what it sounds like,at points you eat up some words.


Overall i like it,fairly decent material.I think the beat seemed hard for you to stick on.The hook is not to good if your tryna do oldschool i woulda been tempted to drop bar and just keep the sample. The tracks concept is a bit of a mish mash of not new ideas but you worked it fairly well.Beat was nice so good job mart

6/10

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

hmmm...

to me it sounds like your tryna attempt old school which is pretty hard to master.The beat isnt per say 'old school'...i aint sure if this is what you was going for so that by and by.

The first verse was pretty decent,some points you had too many words per bar and slipped of the beat slighty,nothing major but is noticable.

Second verse again at points you had too many words per bar and slipped,like for example when the beat breaks down the flow gets sloppy...aint too sure what to suggest...hmmm...good verse though pretty solid lyrics at points.

Third verse is ok and yet again your struggling to stay on beat from what it sounds like,at points you eat up some words.


Overall i like it,fairly decent material.I think the beat seemed hard for you to stick on.The hook is not to good if your tryna do oldschool i woulda been tempted to drop bar and just keep the sample. The tracks concept is a bit of a mish mash of not new ideas but you worked it fairly well.Beat was nice so good job mart

6/10

thx for the breakdown man

yeh, it was an attempt at old school, with a sorta new school twist, if that makes sense lol anywae thats what we were goin for with the beat and yeh with the chorus it was just doin somehting new, when mart put out the idea of having quotes from rocky on it i was like yeh lets do something different than my usual hook..since as youve probably noticed i use the same technique every hook i do, so i thought itd be good to try soemthing new thx again man

@sarah , thx girl


@ax-d, ill upload it and PM you da link man

[AspirinE]

I must say i love the beat, im planning to blackmail mart this summer for something like this.

As far as the raps go, you certainly improved the lyrics and i like them, i can even hear some pretty good word play in the delivery which ive never heard from you before bar. But try to keep up with the beat, just not enough clarity, its like ur jumping ahead of yourself. Perfect your songs with more than 3 or 4 takes, do it to the point were u drop every word to such precision that you don't need to think about it, because i can "hear u think" before u spit a line. Concerning delivery you need to speak out of ur chest, not ur head (that means u need to learn to control breath... etc).

[Mc Cubz]

I must say i love the beat, im planning to blackmail mart this summer for something like this.

As far as the raps go, you certainly improved the lyrics and i like them, i can even hear some pretty good word play in the delivery which ive never heard from you before bar. But try to keep up with the beat, just not enough clarity, its like ur jumping ahead of yourself. Perfect your songs with more than 3 or 4 takes, do it to the point were u drop every word to such precision that you don't need to think about it, because i can "hear u think" before u spit a line. Concerning delivery you need to speak out of ur chest, not ur head (that means u need to learn to control breath... etc).

I think the main flaw in this is the clarity if your voice, you can still flow very nice without demon speed, like when you did the hook for the pride tune. otherwise props for as ever being so admirably prodcutive lol.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

I must say i love the beat, im planning to blackmail mart this summer for something like this.

As far as the raps go, you certainly improved the lyrics and i like them, i can even hear some pretty good word play in the delivery which ive never heard from you before bar. But try to keep up with the beat, just not enough clarity, its like ur jumping ahead of yourself. Perfect your songs with more than 3 or 4 takes, do it to the point were u drop every word to such precision that you don't need to think about it, because i can "hear u think" before u spit a line. Concerning delivery you need to speak out of ur chest, not ur head (that means u need to learn to control breath... etc).

thx man i tried on this to up my lyrics glad it got noticed lol and thanx for the feed on the flow ill work on it

@killa - thx man yeh the summer is gonni be crazy

[B.A.D.]

just a reminder

zshare please

[B.A.D.]

damn, nice ol skul thang u gots there
the lyrics are amazin hahaha... the verses r good, but hook is strange haha, can't deny its good
the flow is good, in little parts its kinda lost, but nothin to worry about
the multis played on it is good
your voice matches the beat
great beat by the way

great track

[Kez]

Your verses are good flow and good lyrics as usual, i like the feel to them, but i don't like the hook ata ll Dunno what it is, maybe it's the samples in the background distract me or whatever, but i just don't like it.

Still a good track though, 7/10

[bg_pop]

I like the beat Like the way you flow