by Kez » Aug 14th, '07, 02:55
Great beat
You flow really well, but when you begin rapping it's just way too clear to me that your acapella is too low. The layovers contract with the main vocals, gets it jumbled up.
The hook, again, too low, normally hooks are louder than the verses.
Your delivery is getting slightly better. Maybe you should try to write so that you're rapping more with less blank spaces inbetween, might help improve your delivery. You know by speeding up.
Second hook is mixed off beat. Or was it intentional?
Third verse is same as the others.
Third hook is mixed back on beat, i'm glad to see.
Liked you fading out with your vocals, that was good, but the little "click" noise thing at the end just ruined the feel of it in a way.
Overall: 6/10