N Vsbl vs IceAxe

[N Vsbl]

IceAxe, you’ll need a med evac after my attack. You’ll be so hard hit you’ll be more retarded than you are right now, if you can believe it

My rhymes will be your eulogy. You won’t even see me. Like a ninja I’ll spin ya, punch, kick and flip ya. My verbal ju jitsu will chew up and spit ya

out like somethin’ nasty. You’d better have fast feet. My words like an AK will leave you bloody and gasping

When I spit this shit it hits like a fist, so get outta my way, boy. This shit ain’t your Gameboy. It’s my life and it’s real and I ain’t gonna deal with no phony young rapper computer hacker

You’re completely unlyrical. So dumb it’s hysterical. If you rhymed two words it’d be a motherfucking miracle

So go hump your mother, and tell her you love her.
Your days are at an end, you seen your last summer
vacation in the sun, son, and this ain’t my best pun,
But I’m loaded and cocked so RUN, FORREST, RUN!!

[IceAxe]

Wasn't it 6 lines? I see like... 10 here.

[N Vsbl]

Sorry about that. Feel free to take as much time as you want.

[IceAxe]

N Vsbl thinks he's invincible, but doesnt make it visual
it's just empty threats, you wont make it physical

you wouldn't be ill if you had heart, brain, and eye cancer
never will you outskill a hard-slain rhyme panzer

wont matter who wins, you're hits aren't detractin from this
dont battle again unless you can come back with some shit

you're practically cheerin for death, by spearin war-heads
Im sheerin your head when your readin some redd lyrics more def

your set of phyrrics at best aren't clear but a mess
your career's put to rest as my lyrics hit rest

EX:

redd- to made clean, organized (referin to his jumbled structure)
phyyric: something with two short syllables (most of his multis are two syllables)
rest: rest as if dead, or in musical terms; silence

ok, now vote

[4D]

FLOW - Ice Axe
STRUCTURE - Ice Axe
PUNCHES - Ice Axe
MULTIES - Ice AXe
RHYMES - Ice Axe
VOCAB - Ice Axe
COMPLEXITY - Ice AXe
NAMEPLAY - IceAXe

Pretty straight-forward voting here. NVSBL ya didn't do yourself any favours with bad structure, 5 overlong sentences and 2 rhyming couplets at the end, which were actually better structured than your main lines. Your rhymes were too simple and basic too win rhymes or multi's cats, punches were a bit blah blah, rhyming about hittin someone hard but not actually hittin' hard ('Cos there were no personals or nameplay) is always gona lose ya votes. Good effoort though, and I can see some potential, just work on your multi's, complexity and structure, good luck for next time.

Vote, Iceaxe.

[N Vsbl]

Thanks for the pointers, 4D.

[4D]

No problem, and both ye fuckers get voting in other battles!!

[C-Game]

IA had it in in most/all cats

but i liked NVsbls punches and it was humorous as well

but man except for ur last 4 lines .. da others didnt even rhyme
work on ur structure...
its so all over da place its like a lyrical contortionist

and as 4d said.. keep this arena alive

[4D]

2-0 to Iceaxe, more votes people. NVSBL get voting in other battles!

[Tash8]

pretty bad from both /

"you wouldn't be ill if you had heart, brain, and eye cancer" ice, i liked what you were doing but that heart brain and eye cancer woulda have been better if you just said one of them, because all are overplayed and well u triple over played them when u said all three

nvsbl, u had some decent punches but u kinda ruined it with your lines and the rhyming and this line backfired : "rhymed two words it’d be a motherfucking miracle" since he rhymed way more than you did

i gotta give this to ice, but ice needs to get back to his higher level.

[4D]

Battle over, K.O goes to IceAxe. Good battle people, and props for voting Tash.

[Tash8]

Battle over, K.O goes to IceAxe. Good battle people, and props for voting Tash.

i would vote, but i don't because people here don't vote either, which kind of pisses me off, you guys rejected making a feed first in creative writing, well how about you have to vote on a battle before u can post ur battle? and each person has do that so when u post one battle, u get 2 votes for other battle..