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Exercise

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 7th, '07, 17:20

see im lyrically mastered liqour got me plastered
quicker than a fast word so a snicker at you bastard
that im blasting i be casting you you frozen in fear
icicle as your tear a see you when you near
shittin out your rear start quitin your a queer
like the eye for a straight guy
my lyrics so hot they be turning a straight bi
my mind is set like the state of ny
n that wont ever be a changing like never re a ranging
so no exchanging your money for the passion
not even as the last action or for a mass fraction
thats not an atraction that im atracted to
people extracting my flow they just disctracted you
n this is war time not your time this is TMW me n k.i
hayi coming U.S running start slay rhyme time
im disgusting on the mic im just busting to fucked to write
n i aint trusting trust sucks tonight so ill contruct a flight
let the gaseline drip n end up in light then ill have the biggest shine right
im a consious rapper drop a comercial clapper kill myself
sell a million so my family get looked after
drop eleven albums after death n everyone will say i took after pac
n thats a scottish shock



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was bored so i finshed some practive i had written threw it to a beat and recorded :y:

aint nothing series as youll find out by the end lmao :p
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Re: Exercise

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 7th, '07, 18:38

the lyrics were good, but you could tell by the delivery you didn't take much time on it. great for practice tho lol. "shittin out your rear start quittin youre a queer" was a hot line.
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Re: Exercise

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Oct 7th, '07, 18:42

yea wut he said...ur delivery wasnt good...would u take more time then it could've been better
and lyrics are pretty ok...some nice rhymes
overall .... "just keep on goin keep on flowin" :shifty: :worship:
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Re: Exercise

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 7th, '07, 18:51

^ thx guys :y:

yeh i coulda stepped up the delivery but i was just killing 10 minutes, ill probly re-do it and make it into a track once i get the time lol
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Re: Exercise

Postby Vettori » Oct 7th, '07, 21:05

What killa said ...Overall practice is important Good Job man :y:
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Re: Exercise

Postby Kez » Oct 7th, '07, 21:15

Good lyrics
Delivery messed up a few times, but it don't matter cause we know your delivery is on point when you do a proper song.
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Re: Exercise

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 7th, '07, 21:37

^thx ya'll :worship:
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Re: Exercise

Postby B.A.D. » Oct 8th, '07, 03:17

delivery???

i think its good, you just need to rap louder

amazing track btw, lovin this,

bumpin this 4 bar :worship:
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Re: Exercise

Postby randomghost » Oct 8th, '07, 06:19

crazy flow...beat is insane...hot shit man :worship: :y:
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Re: Exercise

Postby mart85 » Oct 10th, '07, 02:36

everybody already said it lol, but nice lyrics, delivery needed a little more work, maybe a matter of practising the verse more before recording it :y: but nice verse :y:
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Re: Exercise

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 10th, '07, 13:28

mart85 wrote:everybody already said it lol, but nice lyrics, delivery needed a little more work, maybe a matter of practising the verse more before recording it :y: but nice verse :y:


thanx man, and yeh this was done in one take lol :sweating:


thnx ax-d n random :worship:
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Re: Exercise

Postby Call Me Pik » Oct 19th, '07, 03:11

yeah i think u shudda took more time wit the delivery the lyrics where good tho
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