Topdawgizalaw Vs SoniK

[topdawgizalaw]

?????

[SoniK]

Yeah i'll battle you

you can go first since u hostin tho

[$0 R3@L]

i think his ran sonik.....anyways erick needs a response dude

[topdawgizalaw]

alright, ill go first but im no good at going first , so here goes:
alright sonik u think u the illest one in town
but i dont see how that could be true u clown
b/c me and ur mom were getting around
last nite, it only cost me 25 cents and an outdated english pound (their old form of currency)
she sucked so bad it was the worst of my life
i wanted to end mine with a knife
so i left in the middle of it to catch the next flight to iraq
hopefully some army servicewomen will have a better rack
than ur mom, who looked like a transvestite, that i banged in the back
then gave her a smack
a whack with my pistol
u know u going to lose this battle their aint no point
like smoking a joint u didnt get from detroit
and i aint no smoker so i wouldnt know
but get oout of here u aint no eminem show
how much a point do i gotta make
let me go eat my chocolate cake
b4 ur fat mom comes near and causes a lifethreatening earthquake




its not that good but thats my first actual battle. u wanna do 2 rounds each

[SoniK]

yo buoy u aint original. u shudnt be alive
wow you managed to diss a woman that's forty five
wow so gangster, so tough, so ghetto and grimey
but when i finish wit yo body parts, its gettin slimey
im lyk ur income tax boy, u can never get rid of me
u shuda neva stepped up G, u shud hav hid from me
im the realest, and u just faker than the tits on Pamela
and u suckin dicks on white rock stars cameras
so before you go against me, its good to read the others
cuz i lost count of how mny dead brothers...
i've caused them to cry. lyrically i'm deadly
and heading for u with a knife to wer ur bed be
target ur moms> nah i feel sorry she gave birth to you
god gave the earth to you and this how u repay him?
becum a faggot dissin other mums for ur pleasure
im captain hook and this battle is the treasure
and my hook is metophorical, cuz it cums from the left
and smaks u in ur ear, and leevz u tone deaf
but u lyrically blind, u need a guide DAWG
guess whos behind DAWG
Slew Em Soni K with the final blow
to ya temple
tke ya to the temple
pray to lord, please forgive me and my temper

[topdawgizalaw]

whoah are u gay
cuz i believe the words i just heard u spray
involved u messing with my body parts and the word slimey
and whats this shit about i shouldnt be alive g



damn i lost this battle i got nothing else good job g

[topdawgizalaw]

i mightve had a chance if i didnt go first
anybody else wanna battle me in another thread

[SoniK]

thanks man, yeh u see ur lyk me u can at least admit when u lose...just lyk i did

and good effort im never one to put neone down dawg, i respect neone with a positive atitude!
u from uk?

[topdawgizalaw]

nah, man, im from the us of a

[topdawgizalaw]

o and can someone please tell me what they think of my raps in creative writing, i need feedback

[AspirinE]

o and can someone please tell me what they think of my raps in creative writing, i need feedback

u need more multies
fair flow
just practice, practice and more practice

[topdawgizalaw]

what are multies, lol

[stealth]

theres a thread explaining all the different types if writing stlye ask a mof to post the link to it

[topdawgizalaw]

ok mods, can one of u post a link to it

[AspirinE]

ok mods, can one of u post a link to it

its stickied already my friend