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Postby DelinQuent » Mar 16th, '08, 07:14

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_so ... ID=6366489

new song about my ex.

Lyrics (some words are taken out, or added)

it's been a solid year, yeah since we broke up/
and as i write this song i'm gettin choked up/
i know you wanna know, you wanna know what/
exactly went wrong, but i couldnt tell ya/
not even in a song, i made ya life hard/
i made ya heart scarred, thank you for lovin/
but this one is on me, you can thank me for nothin/
lookin at me know, i know you're thinkin "fuck him"/
if ever there's a problem, keep in mind i love ya/
no chance for romace, but i'll be ya big brother/
but i think in the furture, we will have our daughter/
and i know that you will make such a great mother/
me in a family couldn't be with no one other/
cept my high school sweetie, my teen age lover/
there's a bond so strong between the each of us/
right now we're down, but soon we'll reach upward/

hush now pretty baby, i know that things been crazy/
and we don't hardly talk, but i think about you daily/
look at what i've done, i'm convinced that i'm mistaken/
cause no matter who i meet, no one could replace you/
as dumb as you are, i could never hate you/
brown haired blonde moments, thats what made me date you/
i'm lookin in the mirror, picturin you there/
in my eyes come tears, and then my heart tears/
cause i'm so scared, things'll never be the same/
youve changed ive changed, things'll never be the same/
and we don't need this pain, it's drivin me insane/
but right now it seems we could never date again/
cause these raps consume me, i'm so deep in the game/
and it seems guys are deep in you, fore they know ya name/
and thats just what i hear, i must say i'm ashamed/
and damn disappointed, tell me who you got to blame?/

i'm sorry that i'm hard on you, but it's just cause i care/
look around laura i'm gon always be here/
cause see we got two hearts, always up to share/
but those same two hearts, are all up in the air/
ask me if i'm still in love the anwer would be yeah/
put this on my life, on this one here i swear/
no matter who says what we will always be a pair/
and no matter whos involved you will always be my bear/ (bear was my nickname for her, instead of babe, sweetie, or any of that shit lol)

feedback is much appreciated.
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 16th, '08, 07:25

the beat was awsome
the song was a lil to lovey dovey for my taste but overall 7.5/10
the lyrics were good not great but good it flowed well
you should put a lil more effort on mixing,,like you should put some echo into your vocals
but i liked the song homie :y: :y:
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Mar 16th, '08, 07:49

thanks for the fast feedback. The beat is by sinima by the way at http://www.soundclick.com/sinima. I'm not too good with my mixing but I get a decent job done lol. Thanks again for the feed.
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 16th, '08, 08:13

DelinQuent wrote:thanks for the fast feedback. The beat is by sinima by the way at http://www.soundclick.com/sinima. I'm not too good with my mixing but I get a decent job done lol. Thanks again for the feed.

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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Mar 16th, '08, 23:07

uppin for feedback :y:
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby Speech » Mar 17th, '08, 22:16

i liked this...ture shit about your vocals..hit the chorus with some special shit...but it was delivered well...hmm....lyrics is aaite...love song :whistle: ..not sooo my type (unlsess i'm in love..wait i am in love ) ...fuck that shit....haha..this was good...i was diggin this...hmm..is it good to name a name in a song..talking bout a name of a person you love...hmm maybe its just me but i wouldn do that some how....oh well....nice song over all...only thing you gotta work on is pronouncing the last word of the bar, as powerfull as the others...you have to catch more breath, true, but you don hear that in my audio..and i'm not fuckin with the volume on my breathing...so don try to hide that youre catching some breath once in a while...good thing :y:

liked the song, nothing i'd bump 24 / 7 tho


7.4 / 10

keep it up or improve even :y:
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Mar 18th, '08, 05:21

thanks for the feed.

normally i don't name girls in my songs but idk this one i felt i had to. thanks for the tip about my last word not being powerful, i'll keep that in mind.
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby Xray » Mar 18th, '08, 09:56

ok song..now think of a different concept im sick of your love songs :p
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Mar 18th, '08, 17:05

lmfao. i got a new song comin pretty soon called "magnetic". by pretty soon i mean, idk when, but soon lol
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby Xray » Mar 18th, '08, 23:13

aright cool im looking forward to the song..and it better be some dark shit :)
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby Tash8 » Mar 19th, '08, 00:36

wait wait, is this a love song about your ex?????
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Mar 19th, '08, 00:39

basically. it's more of a thank you for dealing with my shit, and if you need someone i still care for you and i'm here for you type of track. feel me? lol
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby Tash8 » Mar 19th, '08, 00:45

DelinQuent wrote:basically. it's more of a thank you for dealing with my shit, and if you need someone i still care for you and i'm here for you type of track. feel me? lol


yea man, i get it

cool track though ur flow is a bit repettive

good job
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby DelinQuent » Mar 19th, '08, 06:57

thanks for the feed.

by my flow is repetitive, did you mean on this track? or track to track my flow is the same?
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Re: Thank You-DelinQuent

Postby B.A.D. » Mar 29th, '08, 00:08

been away for 2 weeks so I couldn't feed on anyone, but I really wanted to chek this song out

man, gotta say this is the best I've ever heard from you

the lyrics are excelent, the concept in its individuality its unique, the whole flow and emotion of the track is great, no flaws at all, no mistakes

perfect track

loved it man

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