[NEW]C-Riz ft SajN-We Stand

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

yo people..just a side track....just to not to be forgotten
http://www.zshare.net/audio/143907402c8b8d64/

btw SajN is The Infection or Non Stop lol
enjoy

[Speech]

first verse was cool....c-riz you did cool..just one word you swollowed somehow..."closher"....lol...but delivery was aaite...satrt of the hook is cool...but as it comes to an end, it's rushed a bit...

SajN had a nice verse,,,both of you told a story thatz fresh
sajn flow was on beat but nothing special, still cool tho

last verse (c-riz) had a message....started with "hey parents"....ace!

nice lil track..mixxn wasn too different(speakin of the verses)....

7.5 / 10 ....no 10 / 10 cuz i just didn feel all the pain idk...lol

keep it up

[SajN]

Spizzy : Thanks for the feed man!

Killa : Thanks! umm .. I wasn't reading it but I understand what u mean. I tried to let the voice be like "look what is happening to us" kinda voice lol .. like I son't give a fuck longer kinda voice


But thanks guys, I will work at my emotions and speak (rap) more clear

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

verse 1 - simple, jumpy, delivery isnt great, no force or point put into the lyrics, it just goes through without me caring, i dunno, just isnt there.

verse 2 - i know you aint been doin this for long, so your flow is good for not been doin it long, the lyrics are ok simple but ill look past that, emotion needs to be better aswell as delivery and your dictation needs to be harder and more clear, but good verse.


verse 3 - better this time delivery has more point to it and it sounds like you mean the lyrics, flow is good aswell, best verse on it.


didnt like the hook.



beat - beat is simple and it makes the flow simple the clap/snare is really annoying and to hard.


dunno who produced it or anything but the beat is a bit strong for the track i think.


overall nice job

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

uhmm thx for the feed guyz

[B.A.D.]

the beat is hot

Damn, this is some deep great thang

the first verse is amazing, simply cuz the lyrcs and the vibe of it are at all its top, and really deep

the hook is deep and catchy which is fucking good... really well mixed, at the end its rushed a lil bit, but its ok

Sajn does great on this, c-riz excelent mixing made it sound even better, still missing a lil practice on the flow and the lyrics, but other than that excelent verse

third verse is killa... best verse on the track, again lyrics/flow/structure/deepness does it

great job... really liked the track

[Tash8]

beat is cool besides drums....

c-riz, i think ur main problem is u rap like nonstop syllable after syllable (i dont mean multis), u gotta have breaks to get people to digest... kinda of like 2pac does a lot of breaks, if u heard the young buck - laugh now, cry later... u'd understand what i'm saying.

Hook was cool, i think if SajN did some overlays on it, it would have been tight as fuck.

SajN, flow to the drums, ur down beats are hitting on beat... like ur strong syllables need to hit kicks and snares, silent hit hihats..

[Nu Syd]

beat is cool, crizzy your verse is pretty good, and like spizzy said, you said closher instead of closer lol but all good man, your hook is cool to, i duno if its this speakers, but it needs to be abit louder, Sajn did cool to, need to be abit louder in some parts, give abit more stronger vocal pressence, nice job tho , Rizzys last verse is strong, lyrics on this song is fucken good to, also more I hear the chorus the better it gets, along with this crazy ass beat, fuck this song is good, great job guys, im putting on my mp3 player

[SajN]

Thanks for the feeds guys

I'll work on what ya'll said!

[Xray]

c-riz, i think ur main problem is u rap like nonstop syllable after syllable (i dont mean multis), u gotta have breaks to get people to digest... kinda of like 2pac does a lot of breaks

^^exactly what you should work on. your last verse is pretty good too man..but you really need to have some breaks man...its like your non human breath for fucks sake...

sajn i already told you what i think of the verse...but yeah i can see a bright colab future of the both of you

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

merci to everyone..thx for checkin..

[SajN]

sajn i already told you what i think of the verse...but yeah i can see a bright colab future of the both of you

yeah man, I hope so

[DelinQuent]

i like the beat.

flow is off in spots. don't stuff too many syllables into one line. rhymes and lyrics are kinda weak but they do the job and dont ruin the song.

not into the chorus.

second verse was hard to understand. delivery was weak. sounded bored. not a good verse, keep working.

3rd verse was better. better lyrics and better rhymes, the best verse of the song. the flow is a problem again tho in some spots.

overall i give it a 6/10. needs a lot of work on flow. keep working

[SajN]

thanks for feed

[randomghost]

mmm...the beat is good.....i didnt really like the 1st verse..it was unclear..the beat was higher than the vocal...and the layovers was higher then the orginal pella.....hook is great..voice is good....2nd verse was not that good..lacking delivery.....3rd verse was the best...coz i feel it has more feeling...but still the pella is not masterd properly......good track overall...just the mastering was the problem....