I'm weak but I wanna be the strong.

[The Toy Soldier]

I'm weak but i wanna be the strong
be buff and prove them haters wrong
motherfuckers pay attention to this song
because soon it wont be after long
that i bench your fucking bar with 85s
each side though the pain is like a knive
stabbed to my heart but i still won't reprive
no matter how long i take ill still strive
in an epic struggle to best myself
ill clear the dust off myself when im shelved
back to the lockers because apparently i failed
but grades aint the shit that got me derailed
because after i do the curls ill get this shit nailed
then make to the squats and the benches will tail
used to be a snail to bench but soon ill be like the hulk
with muscles all bulk ill bear happiness no sulk
motherfuckers out in the open im not going skulk
cuz ill lift that shit my strength will exceed
in the feild of weight training my new deed
cuz i want more strnegth fuckers i need my feed
im not gonna live my life in a book and read
ill bench that mothefucking bar alecrity and speed
ill be doing that even when im high on some weed
i dont care for comments about how i suck or what I need
I can do it myself i know what i need to do dont get me wrong
because im the weak but I choose to be the strong
and i stil lwant to bench this shit all year long.


I took the topic of school and channled it into the one class that got me mad today.

[Solace]

i liked it

it seemed like you were rambling at some points, but you know, its all good The beginning parts didnt flow to me, the lines were too short. But we all read stuff in a different way so I might be wrong.

Also, I like this line a lot:

"because after i do the curls ill get this shit nailed"

Peace.

[The Toy Soldier]

i liked it

it seemed like you were rambling at some points, but you know, its all good The beginning parts didnt flow to me, the lines were too short. But we all read stuff in a different way so I might be wrong.

Also, I like this line a lot:

"because after i do the curls ill get this shit nailed"

Peace.

Thanks Ill try to stretch out my lines some more next time.

[Tash8]

45s on each side is only about 135lb and if ur proud of being able to bench that in the future, then you have really really low standards and don't give me this age bullshit, i used to bench that when i was 14. if not before.

[The Toy Soldier]

45s on each side is only about 135lb and if ur proud of being able to bench that in the future, then you have really really low standards and don't give me this age bullshit, i used to bench that when i was 14. if not before.

ill edit it to 85s lol i just got 13 and i cnt bench 45 so yeah im weak hence the title?

[The Toy Soldier]

45s on each side is only about 135lb and if ur proud of being able to bench that in the future, then you have really really low standards and don't give me this age bullshit, i used to bench that when i was 14. if not before.

ill edit it to 85s twice my body weight lol i just got 13 and i cnt bench 45 so yeah im weak hence the title?

[Solace]

45s on each side is only about 135lb and if ur proud of being able to bench that in the future, then you have really really low standards and don't give me this age bullshit, i used to bench that when i was 14. if not before.

ill edit it to 85s twice my body weight lol i just got 13 and i cnt bench 45 so yeah im weak hence the title?

What do you mean by benching a 45/85?

[Xray]

45s on each side is only about 135lb and if ur proud of being able to bench that in the future, then you have really really low standards and don't give me this age bullshit, i used to bench that when i was 14. if not before.

tash stop acting hard you muscly sexy beast

I'm weak but i wanna be the strong
be buff and prove them haters wrong
motherfuckers pay attention to this song
because soon it wont be after long

come on man what the fuck is that? thats simple and boring. weak ass beginning but as it goes on its pretty solid. but yeah you don't need wack ass lines like that if you wanna be strong. gotta start it with something mind breaking so we know your not weak anymore. i also find it pathetic that you wrote a verse about wanting to bench more >_>

[Arabian Shady]

45s on each side is only about 135lb and if ur proud of being able to bench that in the future, then you have really really low standards and don't give me this age bullshit, i used to bench that when i was 14. if not before.

tash stop acting hard you muscly sexy beast

I'm weak but i wanna be the strong
be buff and prove them haters wrong
motherfuckers pay attention to this song
because soon it wont be after long

come on man what the fuck is that? thats simple and boring. weak ass beginning but as it goes on its pretty solid. but yeah you don't need wack ass lines like that if you wanna be strong. gotta start it with something mind breaking so we know your not weak anymore. i also find it pathetic that you wrote a verse about wanting to bench more >_>

well said,
dude its pretty kool that you take inspiration from your daily life, but you have to chose something that you think every 1 relates to, get what i mean? write on something that half the forum relates to
keep writing, criticism helps you improve
read some posts by MCmaybe or Xray or Tash, better yet read some BAR or 4d, these guys are seasoned , if you read what they write you might get ideas on structure, writing styles..etc
do better next time
Peace

[SajN]

read some posts by MCmaybe or Xray or Tash, better yet read some BAR or 4d, these guys are seasoned

Or mine

[The Toy Soldier]

Im trying guys dont get me wrong my goal is to get Xray to not say the word "wack" and when that happens il lknow I can rhyme better.

[Solace]

anyone gunna answer my question?

[The Toy Soldier]

What do you mean by benching a 45/85?

weights i.e

That looks all new and shit compared to our equipment lol.