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Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 1st, '08, 01:02

I chose this path on my own and there aint no goin back
for what awaits me are traps so it seems my road is a one way track

but I'll show them I won't fade to black like did Jay-Z
Cuz I remain with the knack to overtaking the map

can't nobody save me that's an unchanging fact
cuz I'm the only, well maybe, who could erase my past

But as I grow in aging I am left my lonely nest
It's way too late, I'm waving, showing the rest

for this souless baby who was born an outcast
I'm throwing away dreams for disposin in the trash

and more towards the normal, to the portal I'll step
to help me form up my morals cuz important's my rep

I never was spacing or holdin my breath
before when you said Kevin McCoy is a sorta crazy

boy, however i got even more into depth
and my story kept playing n got recorded instead

of being thrown in the waste then
reborn was this thread on this forum for pasting

now boredom is dead, im showing my face
reportin my head's distortion to add

my performance you're tasting
on this court to gain tread

cuz corners they're placing
i was born in the fad of destroying , not waiting

cuz to forfeit, they add annoyance, they hate me
but im a warrior who's glad, yet warnings they're laying...
Last edited by Ka0t1c on Sep 10th, '08, 02:05, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Arabian Shady » Sep 1st, '08, 07:17

DAMN DUDE!!!
this right is here one of your best peices, that was some real soulfull shit man, i reali liked it, the flow was awesome and the way you put the peices together for this is wiked.
amazing drop My fav line tho:

for this souless baby who was born an outcast
I'm throwing away dreams for disposal: in the trash


that has soooo much meaning revolving around it :y:
ArAbIaN ShAdY


We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 1st, '08, 15:55

thanx, i changed my writing style for this one slightly, when i wrote it on paper it is completely different but when i typed it up, this is what i felt was the better of the two... this piece could use some more lines still so keep looking out for more... thanx again for checking this out and reviewing it! :y: :y: :y: :y: :y: :D
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Emadyville » Sep 2nd, '08, 19:13

Def your best. Good rhyming. :y: :y:
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 2nd, '08, 23:13

thanx!
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 5th, '08, 02:55

Pretty dope shit man. Deep stuff, so I give ya' props.

Had a couple lines I liked there:

"I chose this path on my own and there aint no goin back
for what awaits me are traps so it seems my road is a one way track"

and

"can't nobody save me that's an unchanging fact
cuz I'm the only, well maybe, who could erase my past"

Keeeep it up man :b:
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 5th, '08, 03:58

thanx guys, i got more lyrics coming soon, ive already wrote them just need to be typed up...
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby enjinn » Sep 5th, '08, 04:08

you got a nice flow...also feeling the rhymes...i just wish it was longer
each one teaches one
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Re: A Cold Outcast

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 5th, '08, 04:48

ok, thanx, maybe i'll work on it again...
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Re: A Cold Outcast (More Added)

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 10th, '08, 02:06

tell me what you guys think of this...
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