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NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:10

Just wrote this earlier today at the studio. It's got a really unique flow to it. Again, I don't have the beat to show you guys, but hopefully you can still get the right flow (there are a lot of short little pauses through-out it). I kinda think the ending is a little too Eminemish in my opinion, but I still like the way it turned out. Enjoy, and leave some feedback.

519, it's live, so get with me//
It's time, to drink mickies, to dry, this whole city//
My pipe, is soo sticky, from dimes, it's soo trippy//
My mind, is soo tricky, this dyke is soo pretty//
I like, to bite titties, the size, of ripe veggies//
I'm nice, and soo witty, I try, to write steady//
I'm like, a young 50, but white, and not shitty//
I like, to rhyme quickly, and grimey like Biggie//
My high, is like tipsy, alive, and soo picky//
Don't try, and fight with me, I might, just try winning//
This vibe, is like sinning, not bright, and soo tempting//
The hype, is now sending, all guys, to right living//
My pride, has been extending, since time, in the begining//
No lies, when I am spitting, surprise, I'm go-getting//
It's time, to go get 'em, and rise, to momentum//
Soo wise, when I show 'em, they die, from my venom//

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008

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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:18

Finally another new piece from you. Sweet. LOL i love this line:

I'm like, a young 50, but white, and not shitty//


Hilarious. I like the flow and the way you put your words. Good job :y: :happy: Also, your right, the ending does seem a little bit Eminemish.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby SkinNBlista » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:21

I like... would like to hear it tho....
U got it on a link? :y:
Whateva u wanna say, go ahead coz we dont play.
Every word taken to heart, supersensitive, arent u smart.
So how next r u gonna use it, laugh in my face is to abuse it.
Remember me G, coz i'm gonna live til I'm an OAP.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:26

shadymademe wrote:Finally another new piece from you. Sweet. LOL i love this line:

I'm like, a young 50, but white, and not shitty//


Hilarious. I like the flow and the way you put your words. Good job :y: :happy: Also, your right, the ending does seem a little bit Eminemish.

Thanks a lot man, I appreciate it. Glad you found it funny, I never really do funny verses all that much, but I like some of the little punchlines I put in it.
SkinNBlista wrote:I like... would like to hear it tho....
U got it on a link?

Thanks man, and nah, it's not recorded yet. When it is though, I shall upload it on here. Expect LOTS of new tracks to come soon, including "Dedication" on this saturday, my 20th B-Day.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby SkinNBlista » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:43

Great will look out 4 it...
Happy Bday in advance
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Emadyville » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:47

I enjoyed it, if flow is how I was feeling it should be sick :y:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jul 3rd, '08, 21:46

Sounds real sick man, the rhymes were great, and that line about Fif made me laugh too haha. The way I read it, it kinda has like a "No Apologies" flow, no? Either way, can't wait to hear more shit from you bro.

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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 3rd, '08, 22:17

Thanks for the feed everyone, and the early birthday wishes, I really appreciate it.
TheWeirdoIsBack wrote:Sounds real sick man, the rhymes were great, and that line about Fif made me laugh too haha. The way I read it, it kinda has like a "No Apologies" flow, no?

Haha, thanks man, but nah, it's not really like his flow for that song. It's kinda similar, but also very different, lol.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 3rd, '08, 22:51

Chet wrote:I liked it man, good steve as always

Steve Spag wrote:My pipe, is soo sticky, from dimes, it's soo trippy//

my fav line....lets just say, things have changed...I no longer hate something :shifty:

Hahaha, that's funny man. Just don't go overboard like Mr. Spag here, haha, know your limits. And thanks for the feed, as always, your opinion is appreciated.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Darkblade44431 » Jul 3rd, '08, 22:52

this verse reminded me of eminem on re-up..but ehh...that isn't a good thing. this isn't appealing to me. i think it sounded sort of like "jimmy crack corn" i guess, if i were to compare it to anything. i dont like the flow either. in my opinion, you can do better than this. keep at it man, ur a good rapper.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 4th, '08, 00:00

Darkblade44431 wrote:this verse reminded me of eminem on re-up..but ehh...that isn't a good thing. this isn't appealing to me. i think it sounded sort of like "jimmy crack corn" i guess, if i were to compare it to anything. i dont like the flow either. in my opinion, you can do better than this. keep at it man, ur a good rapper.

Thanks for the honest feed man. Yeah, I know this verse is a little Eminemish, like I said above, but I just thought I'd post it anyways, lol.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Solace » Jul 4th, '08, 03:46

Oh yeah and then Happy B-Day in advance! Hows the Life Overdose LP coming along? Is this song gunna be on it?
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 4th, '08, 16:48

shadymademe wrote:Oh yeah and then Happy B-Day in advance! Hows the Life Overdose LP coming along? Is this song gunna be on it?

Thanks dude. And the album is coming along very nicely. I got a few tracks for it recorded already, releasing "Dedication" at some-point tomorrow. I still got a couple tracks that arn't quite finished, but I got plenty of time before I gotta start worrying, haha.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Solace » Jul 4th, '08, 19:31

Steve Spag wrote:
shadymademe wrote:Oh yeah and then Happy B-Day in advance! Hows the Life Overdose LP coming along? Is this song gunna be on it?

Thanks dude. And the album is coming along very nicely. I got a few tracks for it recorded already, releasing "Dedication" at some-point tomorrow. I still got a couple tracks that arn't quite finished, but I got plenty of time before I gotta start worrying, haha.

Ah cool :smoking: Cant wait to hear it :flower:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - 519

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 27th, '08, 19:06

This song is up'd on the audio page for those who wish to check it out, lol.
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