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Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 29th, '08, 02:39

don't read this
i'd rather be feedless as i sit back on the d-list with no tracks that's the realest
cuz oh yes i am feelin' a bit off set like i'm just needless
so full of regret, is my depression not healin'?

what goes on in my head, i won't let it reveal
instead i will deal with my own: how i act, well sealed in
unknown's the fact i can't yield it
'til my traction can pull me from these big cracks and the holes my actions are wieldin'

my soul's changed to black i'm revealin'
cuz my whole aint intact, i am pealin'
all controls stay unmanned when i'm wheelin'
as more of the land i'm now seein'

i'm gone from the pack, i found i'm abandoned: a heathen*
cuz i belong out the GAC*, i'm standin' down for my reasons
i'm well detached, somehow i'm defeated
but my challenge has yet to halt from the beatin'

*gac = global area coverage
heathen = uncivilized

well this piece means i feel like i am by myself and i'm losin' to my own evils in life
hope you like this piece even though it's pretty sad...but very true for me right now, thank you for reading
Last edited by Ka0t1c on Sep 29th, '08, 03:25, edited 3 times in total.
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: d-list

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 29th, '08, 02:48

Dope drop man!
Feelin' the flow for it, likin' the wordplay also.

Keeep it up man.
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Re: d-list

Postby Emadyville » Sep 29th, '08, 02:52

Pretty good, do continue. The rhymes were nice, i felt the flow too. good work.
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Re: d-list

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 29th, '08, 03:22

ok, i did add more to it, glad u guys like this one a lot, i do too!
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Re: d-list

Postby Solace » Sep 30th, '08, 02:45

Kaotic wrote:don't read this


first line says it all. lmao man just kidding im gunna read it but im too lazy right now, but you can count on me feeding it tommorow ;)
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Re: d-list

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 2nd, '08, 03:20

ok, where's ur feed?!
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Re: d-list

Postby Solace » Oct 2nd, '08, 21:47

Kaotic wrote:ok, where's ur feed?!

oh shit man, i was thinking to myself "hey i think i promised someone ill feed em on audio stage"

i was searching it but couldnt find anyone and im like OH NO IT WAS KAOTIC

sorry man, checking it now


edit: sick stuff man :y: lines i liked
my soul's changed to black i'm revealin'
cuz my whole aint intact, i am pealin'
all controls stay unmanned when i'm wheelin'
as more of the land i'm now seein'

i'm gone from the pack, i found i'm abandoned: a heathen*


it was great man, keep it up, and i hope everything gets better for you :flower:
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Re: d-list

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 3rd, '08, 01:26

thanx, i appreciate your input and i'll be better, right now i have mixed emotions about the Army lifestyle and it's getting to me a bit lately...
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