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NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Solace » Oct 3rd, '08, 00:47

Check it :smoking:

[Chorus x2]
Yo, Crazy in the head, physco with the words,
I'm a homicidal maniac in the works
I can act like an asshole, and be nice too,
but to be truthful I don't give a fuck about you.

[Verse 1]
I'll run up to you, and cook up some beef,
it's fun getting in fights, and gettin' knocked out in the streets,
I'm a perfect role model for little children in grade 2,
I make them smoke weed at 9, and make them hate school,
fuck it, you don't even need a fuckin' education,
for a rapper, all you need is fuckin imagination,
and I was born cocky, but not a little asshole,
this year I turned 13 and got ready to smash hoes,
with a mad flow, like Eminem on The Sauce,
yell and scream my rights just like he did in Mosh,
it's Epiphany, but without Eminem, It'd just be me,
never having any dreams, never goin' crazy,
no people would hate me but then again none would love,
am I sick, stupid, funny, or all of the above?
(Done, Considering Revision)

[Chorus x2]

[Verse 2]
Grew up never givin' a fuck,
and i still don't man, see me and you duck,
jumpin' in the road while a truck goes 70mph,
1 second of chance, i take risks, im not a coward,
Fuck with me, the next day I'll be like Akon,
"Locked Up they wont let me out" what a great song!
im a freak, but i pretend that you are,
and over stupid shit i enjoy takin' it too far,
Benzino, Soulja Boy and Lil Wayne,
a quick list of shitty rappers that rack my brain,
how the fuck could Crank Dat and Lolipop become hits,
obviously a mass proportion of Earth enjoys shit,
and you may not like me, but I dont like me either,
but im not emo, im just schizophrenic ether,
so either you back off, or die,
and the shit i rap about, man its not a lie (Haha)

[Chorus x1]

Comments and suggestions are greatly appreciated.
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Re: NEW - This Is Epiphany (UNDONE)

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 3rd, '08, 01:30

physco in the words,
homicidal maniac in the works


psycho, but ne ways, this is the only part i liked, i think u should start off from here and go forth cuz this was interesting to me... finish it asap! lol :tounge2:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: NEW - This Is Epiphany (UNDONE)

Postby Solace » Oct 3rd, '08, 02:23

Kaotic wrote:
physco in the words,
homicidal maniac in the works


psycho, but ne ways, this is the only part i liked, i think u should start off from here and go forth cuz this was interesting to me... finish it asap! lol :tounge2:

Haha thanks, maybe that should be apart the chorus...I'm just thinking of shit to write, I'm out of ideas for now though.

EDIT: its Friday so im thinking of some more shit to write. I wanna fix up the ending of verse 1, it seems to have fallen off there, and finish verse 2. everything else is done. Enjoy and comment ;)
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Re: NEW - This Is Epiphany (UNDONE)

Postby Solace » Oct 3rd, '08, 23:16

shadymademe wrote:
Kaotic wrote:
physco in the words,
homicidal maniac in the works


psycho, but ne ways, this is the only part i liked, i think u should start off from here and go forth cuz this was interesting to me... finish it asap! lol :tounge2:

Haha thanks, maybe that should be apart the chorus...I'm just thinking of shit to write, I'm out of ideas for now though.

EDIT: its Friday so im thinking of some more shit to write. I wanna fix up the ending of verse 1, it seems to have fallen off there, and finish verse 2. everything else is done. Enjoy and comment ;)

Oh yeah motherfuckers. Bump :smoking:

EDIT: come on a couple hours and NOTHING? i finished it, come on!
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Re: NEW - This Is Epiphany!

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 4th, '08, 04:26

Pretty sick man.
I feel that the flow could have been better if you made some lines shorter though. Some lines have more syllables than others and it kinda throws it off a bit, but not to the extent where I couldn't see what you were doing, lol.

All in all pretty good drop from you.
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Re: NEW - This Is Epiphany!

Postby Solace » Oct 4th, '08, 05:00

Steve Spag wrote:Pretty sick man.
I feel that the flow could have been better if you made some lines shorter though. Some lines have more syllables than others and it kinda throws it off a bit, but not to the extent where I couldn't see what you were doing, lol.

All in all pretty good drop from you.
Keeep it up!
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Hey man thannks :y:

Thanks, im gunna change some lines anyways, hopefully itll flow better then. Thanks, I really appreciate you checked it out :flower:
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby JMG » Oct 4th, '08, 20:54

i liked the hook and it had some good lines in there, needs a little work tho but pretty dope
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Solace » Oct 4th, '08, 20:59

JMG wrote:i liked the hook and it had some good lines in there, needs a little work tho but pretty dope

Thanks a lot, really appreciate it :y: :y:
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Requiem » Oct 4th, '08, 21:23

i loved it. sure, a few extra words here and there. but that's every rapper's problem. great job :y:
hook was great, both verses were sick, nice drop ^as spag said. look forward to it being an audio track. but sometime after The Tape... :8)
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Solace » Oct 4th, '08, 21:24

IceKilla wrote:i loved it. sure, a few extra words here and there. but that's every rapper's problem. great job :y:
hook was great, both verses were sick, nice drop ^as spag said. look forward to it being an audio track. but sometime after The Tape... :8)

definately. I was thinking about putting it on like a special edition of The Tape, after im good with delivery and breathin pauses. Thanks man :y:
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby mcZu » Oct 4th, '08, 22:14

Liked the flow of it, could have been a bit better, but almost everyone struglles with that problem of using to much words.
lyrics were unique and not bad :y:
Overall a nice piece of work :b:
Keep it up :b:
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Solace » Oct 4th, '08, 22:20

mcZu wrote:Liked the flow of it, could have been a bit better, but almost everyone struglles with that problem of using to much words.
lyrics were unique and not bad :y:
Overall a nice piece of work :b:
Keep it up :b:

Thanks a lott! Appreciated :b:
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Emadyville » Oct 4th, '08, 23:22

This wasn't bad. I liked the first verse better than the second. The chorus was ok. I think it flowed pretty well and kept the same insane-ness throughout.
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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Solace » Oct 4th, '08, 23:28

Emadyville wrote:This wasn't bad. I liked the first verse better than the second. The chorus was ok. I think it flowed pretty well and kept the same insane-ness throughout.

Really? cool thanks :y: Yeah i like the first verse better too, other than this part:
Benzino, Soulja Boy and Lil Wayne,
a quick list of shitty rappers that rack my brain,
how the fuck could Crank Dat and Lolipop become hits,
obviously a mass proportion of Earth enjoys shit,


That was the only good part of verse 2, imo.


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Re: NEW - It's Just Epiphany

Postby Solace » Oct 10th, '08, 02:24

bump...
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