Friends With Benefits

[Emadyville]

I wrote this cause I am currently in this situation. I think it might be good enough to make into a full song, and do the other verse where you get hooked on the girl. Show both sides of the story and add a hook. Feedback Please!

She could be the one thing, that extra element,
The cute one, petite, I’m not talking an elephant,
She can be wild, she can be girly or elegant,
She can act one way but something else is evident,
You have to look deep, the rest is irrelevant,
That one time she shows too much sentiment,
That’s all you need, when you know it’s evident,
It’s when she thinks there is no detriment,
When you only want to be friends with a benefit,
And you know she thinks there is some relevance,
She doesn’t see it but you’re really the pessimist,
You see the danger and you take the estimates,
She keeps calling and you try to keep pleasantness,
She i-m’s you and you are just sentence-less,
She won’t stop at all and it’s driving you senseless,
The thrill is gone, all the sex is suspense-less,
You want to back out and still keep your senses,
And she gets you to the point that you have to pen this,
You don’t know what to say or how to end this,
While at the same time you don’t care if you mend this,
Maybe it’s her, maybe she was just a temptress,
Forget it, just mark her with the others on the ex-list…

[<Stiiccy>]

wow your a fucking beast...
i cant believe you kept that same rhyme scheme going DAMN DUDE

fuckin big daddy kane jr or some shit lol

10/10
your the shit
i hope this shows in your recorded shit

[Emadyville]

wow your a fucking beast...
i cant believe you kept that same rhyme scheme going DAMN DUDE

fuckin big daddy kane jr or some shit lol

10/10
your the shit
i hope this shows in your recorded shit

Thank you bro, realized I used evident twice but I think it could work, do you think I should make it into a full track and add the second verse with the idea where I write where the guy gets attached to the girl?

[<Stiiccy>]

wow your a fucking beast...
i cant believe you kept that same rhyme scheme going DAMN DUDE

fuckin big daddy kane jr or some shit lol

10/10
your the shit
i hope this shows in your recorded shit

Thank you bro, realized I used evident twice but I think it could work, do you think I should make it into a full track and add the second verse with the idea where I write where the guy gets attached to the girl?

naa dont make this into no deep shit...
keep it like you got it if you do another verse

make it dirty haha

[Emadyville]

Damn but how can i continue the theme without that concept? This was played by the end of this verse.

[<Stiiccy>]

Damn but how can i continue the theme without that concept? This was played by the end of this verse.

exactly when ever you do shit like this..its gonna get played out quick..of course with those rhymes i think it would take lil longer

[Emadyville]

Damn but how can i continue the theme without that concept? This was played by the end of this verse.

exactly when ever you do shit like this..its gonna get played out quick..of course with those rhymes i think it would take lil longer

Yeah but I mean, without doing a verse from the guys perspective, how else can I make this a full song, I don't want this verse to go to waste ya know? Unless I get on a track with someone else and just spit my verse?

[<Stiiccy>]

Damn but how can i continue the theme without that concept? This was played by the end of this verse.

exactly when ever you do shit like this..its gonna get played out quick..of course with those rhymes i think it would take lil longer

Yeah but I mean, without doing a verse from the guys perspective, how else can I make this a full song, I don't want this verse to go to waste ya know? Unless I get on a track with someone else and just spit my verse?

yeah i think you should do that...get someone else on it..make it a lil more diverse

[The Toy Soldier]

fuckin big daddy kane jr or some shit lol

not quite he would need to spit a multi every two-four words


ON-TOPIC: Nice end- rhymes I like it.

[<Stiiccy>]

not quite he would need to spit a multi every two-four words

in was exagerating but ok

[Emadyville]

fuckin big daddy kane jr or some shit lol

not quite he would need to spit a multi every two-four words


ON-TOPIC: Nice end- rhymes I like it.

Hey man you want multi's check out any of my other posts. Sticcy can back me on that one.

Edit: Btw thanks for the feed. This I just wrote in like 20 minutes, just putting my thoughts down. If went back I'm sure I could multi a lot of that shit. I kind of took yours out of context, I take pride in rhyming, and I usually multi at least 75% of my shit. Check my song "The election" in creative writing, you'll see what I mean.

[Steve Spag]

Dooooooooope!
Haha, good read man, loved the flow and the rhyme-scheme for it, really catchy shit. I can tell this is gonna be a sick track, you should deffinetly record it.

Keep it up dude.

[Emadyville]

Dooooooooope!
Haha, good read man, loved the flow and the rhyme-scheme for it, really catchy shit. I can tell this is gonna be a sick track, you should deffinetly record it.

Keep it up dude.

Thanks man, what do you think about keeping the concept for another verse and doing it from the guy's perspective where he kind of falls for the girl? Any other suggestions?

[Emadyville]

Awesome dude, nice little love sickness

next verse should be about he dumped her, but realized he wants her back when he see's her with another guy

some yin yang shit

Damn that's actually a good idea. Except it's supposed to not be my girlfriend, just a friends with benefits thing. But I think I can still make it work. Thanks for the feed.