Excerpt From ParaLeL World-Possible Single-

[The Toy Soldier]

Might be a single if I make a EP out of this.

[Chorus]
Welcome to a place beyond your wildest dreams
everything in this world is nothing what it seems
here when you fight you don't have to go to extremes
it just takes skill to fulfill one of your dreams
Cuz its the ParaLeL world (Everybody Scream !!!)
The simplest Place (Everyone's Supreme!)

[verse1]
Welcome to my home my imaginary place
here every human is a part of a unified race
here your heritage is easy to embrace
because life in the milky way is a disgrace
welcome to my galaxy of easiest psychology
Let me put to you this way (Whip out the Analogies!)
ParaLeL is to Peace as soulja boy is to faggot
Subliminal Message? no its out in the open, man i just rapped it
sorry soulja but Ice T was right about you
you eat a dick and and thats without a doubt true
but this song isn't about you so without any further ado, soulja boy, adieu
back on track cintraks on a Rap that names abolished though now its scarce
because now I'm ParaLeL Parked in a weelchair
get it parked? Get it weelchair? now I aint making fun of cripples
but I'm just laughing and telling a joke showing my dimples
see you can laugh with me too here in ParaleL world
careful though shits still twisted this place will have you whirled

Ok I want HARD criticism not some "oh i dont liek the rhymes but flows good" if its shit SAY IT I'm a dude i can take criticism I wont get butthurt I want to know what part of the song you liked the most and what was shit about it I want peopel to actually look at this cuz starting here its in-depth spits its no more simple topics I want real comments expressed.

Please and Thank you.

[Solace]

Yo man. Ill. Definately better than the old stuff. Oh man I laughed at that Soulja Boy line. Killed it

This was pretty much the only lines i liked

ParaLeL is to Peace as soulja boy is to faggot
Subliminal Message? no its out in the open, man i just rapped it
sorry soulja but Ice T was right about you
you eat a dick and and thats without a doubt true
but this song isn't about you so without any further ado, soulja boy, adieu
back on track cintraks on a Rap that names abolished though now its scarce
because now I'm ParaLeL Parked in a weelchair
get it parked? Get it weelchair? now I aint making fun of cripples
but I'm just laughing and telling a joke showing my dimples

The rest were just "parelel is awesome" in a different way or another. I hope i get to hear this on your ep man.

And also the beginning of the verse was ill too man. I wnat some more of this shit

[The Toy Soldier]

Yo man. Ill. Definately better than the old stuff. Oh man I laughed at that Soulja Boy line. Killed it

This was pretty much the only lines i liked

ParaLeL is to Peace as soulja boy is to faggot
Subliminal Message? no its out in the open, man i just rapped it
sorry soulja but Ice T was right about you
you eat a dick and and thats without a doubt true
but this song isn't about you so without any further ado, soulja boy, adieu
back on track cintraks on a Rap that names abolished though now its scarce
because now I'm ParaLeL Parked in a weelchair
get it parked? Get it weelchair? now I aint making fun of cripples
but I'm just laughing and telling a joke showing my dimples

The rest were just "parelel is awesome" in a different way or another. I hope i get to hear this on your ep man.

And also the beginning of the verse was ill too man. I wnat some more of this shit

thnxi appreciate it

the paralel awesomeness is suposed to symbolize new world order but in a different world

[Ka0t1c]

i didnt understand much of it but this line is the best part in it in my opinion

now I aint making fun of cripples
but I'm just laughing and telling a joke showing my dimples

[The Toy Soldier]

i didnt understand much of it but this line is the best part in it in my opinion

now I aint making fun of cripples
but I'm just laughing and telling a joke showing my dimples

thnx ima clear up more of it in the second verse but like i said earlier its supposed to signify new world order

but just not on earth

[neversnooze]

i liked it, but the parts with soulja boy messed it up, although it rhymed i didnt quite like it

overall: very good flow

[The Toy Soldier]

i liked it, but the parts with soulja boy messed it up, although it rhymed i didnt quite like it

overall: very good flow

danx i might take off the soulja boy part it aint good to go into music the first time already cookin beef

[Solace]

The whole Soulja Boy part should be in some other song deticated to dissing him, it just kinda ruins what your talking about here. The ParaLeL World.

[The Toy Soldier]

The whole Soulja Boy part should be in some other song deticated to dissing him, it just kinda ruins what your talking about here. The ParaLeL World.

true true thats why im taking it out but id have to rework the whole paragraph il lthink aobut it lyricism takes time

[Solace]

I know what you mean. Seriously every time i go all out on my writing youll see "edited 40 times" under the post lmao

[The Toy Soldier]

I know what you mean. Seriously every time i go all out on my writing youll see "edited 40 times" under the post lmao

haha yeah