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Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 15th, '08, 02:53

i'm a wild one with a style of my own when i compile something from my dome for the microphone
i've been going awhile, still there's more time to grow from a small child into my final milestone

check the file, downward spirals i just don't accept, denial's gone
i'd rather smile than be low in a wreck so it's best that i show i'm ready to stretch or i never will glow

i gotta catch my gold, but full of traps are these roads wherever i roam
i don't know if i'll adapt to the toll, but my impact on the globe's in my notepad that i wrote

and the results i should add and promote, i won't ask if you'll vote, my broadcast shall uncloak
like a mask once the facts i expose to the mass cuz i won't pass up this whole task to dispose to the trash

my act is no joke, im'a rap til i'm broke
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 15th, '08, 04:40

Pretty sick man, liked the flow for some parts. Not your best peice in my opinion, but it was cleverly written and I respect that, haha.

i gotta catch my gold, but full of traps are these roads wherever i roam
i don't know if i'll adapt to the toll, but my impact on the globe's in my notepad that i wrote


That was my fav. part of it.

Keep it up man!
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Oh, and if ya' have time check out my new drop "Misery Loves Company" and let me know what ya' think. Your feed is always highly respected.

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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Requiem » Oct 15th, '08, 05:41

sick man. altogether incredible. :worship:

kinda sorta dont' get the "dome for the microphone" line tho :unsure:
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Tash8 » Oct 15th, '08, 05:47

too robotic sounding, can't see anyone rapping this without sounding like rain matrix on a mic.
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 15th, '08, 07:05

tash8 thanks for tha free advertisement
I have a girlfriend tho so don't make this any more wierd than it has to be

dude's probably hating cuz u weren't afraid to give me some feedback
this was a good piece I could relate to it cuz I'm broke as hell yur style is unique and very talented

oh and if I'm a robot does that mean I can blow tash 8's head off and not do time
oh well even if I do tha time some wack rapper would come back as tash 9
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby JMG » Oct 15th, '08, 09:03

Why you gettin so offended of him callin you a robot? Don't be ashamed of what you are!
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Urban Punk » Oct 15th, '08, 09:20

I love the creativity you put into it keep it up bro

Tash8 wrote:too robotic sounding, can't see anyone rapping this without sounding like rain matrix on a mic.


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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 15th, '08, 13:52

you guys have no life... how would u know I sounded like a robot unless u were listening to my stuff?
I didn't force you to did I? I'm not bringing up your name out of nowhere show me the same respect or it's obvious your too chilish to take rap seriously... I work with a real record company not some I'll suck u off McMaybe if I can do a collabo shit... u see that McMaybe did nothingto me and I dissed him sound familar? - I bet you fags will take issue with that tho
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 17th, '08, 03:18

kinda sorta dont' get the "dome for the microphone" line tho


dome = head
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Rap Til I'm Broke

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 17th, '08, 03:21

thanx Steve, IceKilla, Rain, & Urban Punk, i'm glad u gave me some positive input on this piece and helping me improve my writing

and Tash, this piece doesn't sound robotic
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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