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Laugh Now (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 15th, '08, 23:50

just freestyling, let me know what u think :happy:

laugh now or cry later,
my rhymes bite harder than an aligator,
my skill keeps me on top of u haters,
i'm hip-hop's savior, the ill rhyme maker
making people disappear like a fucking erasor,
but don't take shots at me,
cuz i'll do the matrix, and watch the bullets fly past me,
and like a slinky, i'm ready to spring into action,
push me i push back, it's just newton's law of reaction,
what, r u lost in my lines, can't understand my rhymes?
better buy a dictionary cuz i spill guts like enzymes,
but back to the point, of this whole freestyle,
if u don't think u suck, it's cuz ur in denial,
so wipe that smile, off of ur face,
u the base of the game dead space,
which is an accurate description of ur brains wavelength.
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Re: Laugh Now (Freestyle)

Postby Solace » Oct 16th, '08, 00:51

It was pretty good for a freestyle. Some parts were off flow to me but we all flow other peoples peices differently so i might be wrong. There werent any really good lines in particular. Better than any freestyle i could put off, so good job man :y:
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Re: Laugh Now (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 16th, '08, 00:55

^thx man. i was just rhyming, it flows fine for me. but i was singing it in my head, so it works for the way i was doing it. i guess it seems different reading, but thx for the comments. much appreciated :8)
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Re: Laugh Now (Freestyle)

Postby Jay-19 » Oct 16th, '08, 01:03

Yeah, really sick for a freestyle! Better than anything I could ever freestyle, that's for damn sure!
Don't know what else to say other than good job man! :y:
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Re: Laugh Now (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 16th, '08, 04:10

thx alot :happy: keeps me pumped, might even do another freestlye before the day's over :shifty:
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Re: Laugh Now (Freestyle)

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 16th, '08, 16:19

not bad at all especially for freestyle
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