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Postby ilovemeghan » Oct 20th, '08, 01:38

I can feel the evil come; I saw this premonition
I can’t feel my knees they’re numb, now I’m just wishing
I didn’t see this vision; it was like the devil and god himself kissing
An evil so powerful; but in this premonition
I saw something was missing
But I can’t figure out what it was, there is a chill in the air
I’m freezing; with this chill in the air I’m sneezing
But still in my ear; I can hear breathing
It’s creepy, shit I’m starting to freak now
All alone in the street, I can’t even speak out
No one will hear me, but I can feel something around me
I hear these sounds see; I think something has found me
But wherever I look I just see street lights and houses
It’s feeling so empty, so cold and lonely
Just walking up on my own, nobody here knows me
Wait; I just remembered something from my dream
A voice telling me not to see things as they seem
I saw things in my dream, things I didn’t need to see
The disturbing things I had seen; are now in front of me
I turn around but I’m surrounded, it’s loud here
All the screaming I can’t handle it its profound here
They’re circling me, they’re spiralling, and they’re spinning
I’m dizzy; I’m falling over my laces I’m tripping
All of sudden I’m sitting
In a club, the music is banging and people are laughing
I start to regain my consciousness; and I see people are dancing
What the hell just happened? I look on my table, it looks so soft
So I lay down and rest my head on it, I feel myself drifting off
(CLEAR!)
I can’t open my eyes! I’m blind, no wait, I can see a light
I can see people surrounding me, but they’re not smiling
People look at me in horror, as I struggle to understand
Why I can’t seem to move, I can’t feel my own hands
I see my best mate crying and swearing at me
“What the fuck are you doing?! You’ve gone crazy!”
I don’t follow, but then I look to my side
I see police cars and I can see that someone had died
I look to my left; I see a gun on the side
It’s easy to see, the devil had seeded in me
The premonition wasn’t a dream, it was reality
I had taken a couple drugs, mushroom and an E
And got a gun out and started shooting randomly
Shit...
Where you at man?
Let me see them hands in the sky
Detroit Motherfuckers 'till we die
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Re: don't do drugs (wrote this in 15 minutes)

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 20th, '08, 01:56

Begining to middle was dope as fuck. Had some amazing multie's, good shit. I think it kinda fell off towards the end in my opinion, but the rest was hot.

Keep it up.
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Check out my new piece "Chasin' A Ghost" if ya' got time, let me know what ya' think.
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Re: don't do drugs (wrote this in 15 minutes)

Postby ilovemeghan » Oct 20th, '08, 02:12

Steve Spag wrote:Begining to middle was dope as fuck. Had some amazing multie's, good shit. I think it kinda fell off towards the end in my opinion, but the rest was hot.

Keep it up.
:y:

Check out my new piece "Chasin' A Ghost" if ya' got time, let me know what ya' think.


you're exactly right, i was runnin out of steam towards the end.
ok i'll check that out now
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