Keystyle

[Emadyville]

Just started writing, didn't really thin of shit I just kind of went with it, too about 10 minutes. Hopefully it at least makes sense lol feedback if you want, it'll be appreciated.

People say crazy I say I’m infectious,
I say I’m myself and I’ve reached the nexus,
Where do you go when everyone has left us,
When you can’t curse or say anything sexist,
Raps all controversy so they lecture us,
I say it’s rough water yeah it’s treacherous,
But it’s in our blood you can never severe us,
We’re attached at the hip, always together just,
Two minds in one go ahead call me bipolar,
My career just started never will you say I’m over,
Don’t say it to me or behind my back over my shoulder,
Maybe I dream big, yeah maybe I’m a high hoper,
But somewhere along the line of sane and not so,
I slipped up, yeah I’m off, maybe I got slow,
But maybe I’m just the sane one you don’t know,
I just can’t quit, I’ll never leave and won’t go,
But if I do and one day you never hear me again,
And the ink of the pen always just tears it when,
I put it the paper and my words turn to vapor,
I’ll be sane again but maybe sooner than later,
Maybe later than sooner, maybe the haters,
Will hope on the wagon and be a wagon jumper,
Rock fans will turn to rap bumpers,
And everyone will bump rap on the daily,
If that happens I’m a quit but maybe,
I’ll be the one they bump to when they pissed,
The one to get turned up instead of missed,
And I’ll be the shit to get people wanting more,
My album will be one they put in the front of the store,
And I’ll be the hot shit so many plays on the airwaves,
And forget about the past and the I don’t care days,
Either way it happens I’m a keep trying to hear ways,
To improve, keep it real, and do it the fair way

[theJFKshow]

I'd like to see more internal and multiple rhymes within each line, but overall I really like it.

[Emadyville]

I'd like to see more internal and multiple rhymes within each line, but overall I really like it.

Yeah man I know, this was a kesytyle tho lol. I just sat and wrote it without much thought. If I were to sit down and write verse I'd do all that. Surprised tho I thought the rhymes were pretty good for 10 minutes. Thanks for feeding though I appreciate it.

[Steve Spag]

Yeah man, actually not bad at all. Like slimthps said, it would have been better with more internal-rhymes, but it was good for a keystyle. I was just readin' it to a beat and it sounded pretty good to me.

Anyways, keep it up man!

[Emadyville]

Yeah man, actually not bad at all. Like slimthps said, it would have been better with more internal-rhymes, but it was good for a keystyle. I was just readin' it to a beat and it sounded pretty good to me.

Anyways, keep it up man!

Thanks bro.