NEW - Seems Like A Faggot

[Solace]

Alright. New diss song against this kid acting all bitch in school, which my friend eventually knocked the fuck out for acting like a bitch

[Chorus x2]
Who's that bitch?
Seems like a faggot.
Who's that guy?
Seems like a faggot.

[Verse 1]
Seems like this faggot, likes to talk shit,
But he certainly aint got the balls to walk it,
Telling us, "Dont fuck with me, im gunna kill you",
Reminds me of Anthony, stealing his diss too?
Acting so tough, forehead reaches my chest,
With face like yours, you should be under arrest,
I'll flip you upside like your mom flips burgers,
Just seen her last night, be thankful I aint hurt her,
Your a gangster, please dont flatter your self,
come here and battle me, lemme shatter ya health,
You gunna stab me, I aint trying to hear it,
Cause Ima make your pussy ass bleed as if you were on your period.

[Chorus 2]

[Verse 2]
Seems that faggots, acting like this,
Cant take a joke, can't take a diss,
but hey! This one tried to fight back,
But his disses were stupid, all his shit was wack,
"You're a jackass," Oh man that hurt!
Say it one more time and get your face stuck to the dirt,
"I'm gunna get your mom, tie her to the bed!"
Fuck you bitch, at least my mom ain't dead,
But I gotta say man, I was laughing my ass off,
Acting thug like 2Pac, ready to blast off,
You said you would kill me, you couldn't get me down,
In fact you got knocked out, you look like a clown!
Oh and guess what? He started to cry,
Told other people my friend used a weapon, he fucking lied,
You almost got police involved, we had fun, don't spoil it,
Either way you couldn't get shit on me even if i was a toilet.

[Chorus x2]
*Chorus fades*

It's done for now but there might be changes here and there.

[Emadyville]

Haha sic i liked it, good shit

[Requiem]

interesting... nice concept, sick rhymes, especially towards the tail end of verse 1. ur definitely improving over ur last song. more consistent rhyme scheme, and line flow. getting better.

^i'm 17, and i don't even cuss that much

[JMG]

u get better each drop

[lilrossy]

yeah man that shit was good. loved the last line.

[Solace]

Thank all of you. First time ive gotten consistent reviews on my drops

[Slim Zaddy]

good job man ,, you are on the right track

[The Return]

Thats sik
You say its 'undone', will you be posting it up when its fully completed?

[neversnooze]

liked this part alot

Your a gangster, please dont flatter your self,
come here and battle me, lemme shatter ya health,

very good diss

[Xray]

haha pretty good man, some nice punches there

last line was delivered as if it was a freestyle battle, sick shit.

[Solace]

Thanks all of you! I think this ones gunna be a keeper. And @The Return, yes, i always edit my post and put more on it until is done, then i take away UNDONE form the title.

edit: Seems that faggots, acting like this,
Cant take a joke, cant take a diss,
but heyy! This one tried to fight back,
But his disses were stupid, all his shit was wack,
"You're a jackass," Oh man that hurt!
Say it one more time and get your face stuck to the dirt,
"I'm gunna get your mom, tie her to the bed!"
Fuck you bitch, at least my mom ain't dead,
But I gotta say man, I was laughing my ass off,
When you were acting all thug as if you were 2Pac,
You said you would kill me, you couldnt get me down,
Infact you got knocked out, you look like a clown!
Oh and guess what? He started to cry,
Told other people my friend used a weapon, he fucking lied,
You almost got police involved, we had fun, dont spoil it,
Either way you couldnt get shit on me even if i was a toilet.

You think thatd be a good second verse or its too weak?

[Rain Matrix]

not bad at all

[Solace]

not bad at all

Thanks man

Anyone got anything to say about my draft of the second verse?

[JMG]

i laughed at the 2nd one flow was good but rhymes a little simple, good tho.

[Solace]

i laughed at the 2nd one flow was good but rhymes a little simple, good tho.

Alright thanks, ill modify it a bit and put it up.