Love verse?

[Emadyville]

Not sure just wrote this, kinda like a love type verse, feedback appreciated.

My mind can run off track at times and derails,
I can lose focus I notice I don’t see details,
Whether at home or when I’m up at DeSales,
But in the end one thought will always prevail,
And that’s you girl, the one and only female,
That keeps me sane when I read your e-mails,
When I go out with you even if it’s retail,
Or dinner, I love it, there’s no chance he bails,
And no chance she fails she already got me,
I’m a little love drunk so my vision is spotty,
But I’d rather not be able to see and still listen,
She murdered my heart when I found out she killed kissin,
I couldn’t lie or rhyme with false statements,
I just hope I never ever need a replacement,
I’ve been hurt before and I’m not complacent,
But I feel that time we hung out in the basement,
And you looked at me like I was all you ever needed,
Made me feel the same way and I pleaded,
With myself to understand I am not conceited,
My love is for you it’s not mine to keep it…

[Slim Zaddy]

amazing man ,, i love ,, love rhymes , and this is nice

[Emadyville]

Thanks a lot.

[mcZu]

Damn, that was straight out the heart.. Nice rhymes, nice message
Really Liked this line:

I’m a little love drunk so my vision is spotty,

Nice piece, keep up the great work

[Emadyville]

Damn, that was straight out the heart.. Nice rhymes, nice message
Really Liked this line:

I’m a little love drunk so my vision is spotty,

Nice piece, keep up the great work

Thank you bro, was out the heart, trying to keep that positive vibe, glad you liked, thanks again.