Hip Hop Is In Me

[lilrossy]

immense luv for hip hop, man, its everything to me,
but i've had it wit you mothafuckers who keep buggin me,
im incensed, cuz im white, you mothafuckers be judgin me,
got me combative, but chu can't take hip hop away from me,
cuz best to believe me, hip hop is in me til da day dat i die,
but you mothafuckers are selfish, all you's do is deprive,
but it only makes me stronger, as i continue to thrive,
by spittin my heart out like diss, and holdin my head high,
and thru da pleasure 'n' pain, i stay true to my name,
cuz in my body, hip hop is flowin thru evey intire vien,
but still u keep bringin up my race, tryin 2 blow out my flame,
bitch if i was scarface, you'd be the cocain, u driven me inzane,
you mothafuckers sayin, cuz of my skin, dat i can't listnin to rap,
and if i get caught listnin to 2Pac, ima wannabe be black,
fuc dat, ima turn dis cap back, turn on pac's track, and bust dat,
stay straped, wita gat, and put my name on da map wit my fucin rap,
U GOT DAT!

[James R.]

The rhyming was weak. As a general rule, if you're going to write something that is aiming to prove something you should do it in a fashion that doesn't leave room for anyone to doubt you. It seems like you're pretty new at writing, but I'm going to give you the same advice I give people that have been writing for years. Up your vocab. Read the dictionary and thesaurus.

[lilrossy]

aight man, thanks for da feedback & the advice.