dissing verse

[Slim Zaddy]

Now or later, you will always be a disgrace even if u hate us
You are useless you have nothing to do but dis the greatest
I know you think that your are the man with good plans
The only think I know about you is that u got no fans
You always trys to implant ideas and thoughts
But to us you’re nothing but a broke holidn a mic then choke
You aint got words to spit u rely on lords to give u the shit
U think u can rhyme in a couple of time using freestyle
You’re mine I can diss u using your own time with an mc way spittn harsh rhymes
Bitch you’re nothin don’t do rap it’s ain't ur game do crack
Let me state that I can give u a smack using my words impact
Using the fact that I’m just dissn a fag and my words are intact
Even that callin ur dudes for your backup wont hold me back
Ohh that’s bad , just slip away from my way gay
Stay on your hay or u will pay for this day your whole life i say
I will make u live in a strife I hve nothing to lose but diss a fagots like ur type

appreciate your feedback though

[Solace]

Flow was off, some parts were nice, no good punches at all really. Some words could have been fixed and grammar was off in areas. Eg.

"Ya I know you think that your are the man with good plans
The only think I knew about you is that u got no fans "

Would probably sound better

"Yeah, I know you think you're the man with blow plans,
Really all I know about you is you got no fans"

Keep it up tho.

[Slim Zaddy]

Flow was off, some parts were nice, no good punches at all really. Some words could have been fixed and grammar was off in areas. Eg.

"Ya I know you think that your are the man with good plans
The only think I knew about you is that u got no fans "

Would probably sound better

"Yeah, I know you think you're the man with blow plans,
Really all I know about you is you got no fans"

Keep it up tho.

well i think the flow was good .,, anyway thanks for your comment ..

[James R.]

Not bad. The flow was kinda off. If you wrote it to a beat then that would make it a little difficult to read since we can't hear it. Aside from that there were some grammatical errors, the most obvious of which were covered in the post before mine. Past that it wasn't bad. The rhyming was very average. There's always time to increase your vocabulary. It can and will make you better.

[Tash8]

Not bad. The flow was kinda off. If you wrote it to a beat then that would make it a little difficult to read since we can't hear it. Aside from that there were some grammatical errors, the most obvious of which were covered in the post before mine. Past that it wasn't bad. The rhyming was very average. There's always time to increase your vocabulary. It can and will make you better.

guess who's back, back again, the great james r!

[Slim Zaddy]

Not bad. The flow was kinda off. If you wrote it to a beat then that would make it a little difficult to read since we can't hear it. Aside from that there were some grammatical errors, the most obvious of which were covered in the post before mine. Past that it wasn't bad. The rhyming was very average. There's always time to increase your vocabulary. It can and will make you better.

thanks for your comment , i will use better vocab next time and i will be better for sure .. i did this on rush ,, next time i iwll take some time to write a good piece of shit ..