NEW STEVE SPAG - Behind A Smile

[Steve Spag]

Alright, well I sure havn't posted up in here for a little bit. I've been here though, reading people's shit even though I'm not always replying. Things have been a little busier for me as of late, but I try my best to get on here and show my respect. I wrote this verse a few days ago...the beat is called "Behind A Smile" by VTZ on Soundclick if you're interested in checkin' it out. Not my best verse, but it was more about the messege than the word-play for this one. Anyways, hope you get the flow, and let me know what ya' think about it; any and all feed is appreciated!

when it's all said and done after my body decays//
will there be laughter by some, or will they trot on my grave?//
or will the people be alarmed by the change?//
'cause yeah, sometimes i just wonder these things//
and one day i might wander away//
to a far away land as if i want it that way//
so you should ponder the things that i say//
'cause if my plans go through, i'll be gone in a day//
spread my wings and just leave this place//
'cause there's no peace on earth, it's just a feast of hate//
and everybody that can reach, will take//
so what's the use in teaching responsibility?//
and no matter what i say you will never see me break//
because i've had it with the pain so i keep prayin' everyday//
i face hatred, but i remain//
up in this place of greatness until my dyin' day//

Notes: "responsibility" is pronounced with an accent to fit the rhyme-scheme.
Some parts will be fixed eventually 'cause I'll probably end up using this piece.

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008

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[Requiem]

sweet rhymes there. loved the concept, flow was consistent, picture was clear. loved every bit of it. glad to see u back on creative writing. the thread's been active lately, namely Me, You, and Shadymademe.

shadymademe's been taking over as of late//
and the two of us are left in his wake//
we both already know what's at stake//
and that's the crown of this creative writing plate//


sry, just had too. lol

[Emadyville]

I liked how you started it, I think if you record it that will catch the listeners ears. Overall I thought it was a good piece, the rhymes weren't bad since you weren't trying to be too lyrical, I enjoyed it though and could relate to some of it, so good work

[Steve Spag]

Thanks for the feed guys, glad you liked it.

And yeah Ice, I've been paying attention to who's dropping what, haha.

[Arabian Shady]

yo that was a solid drop man, best part was that the flow seemed to come naturally, usually you have to add like a couple words here and there to try and get a better response but that shit was wiked,
another good thing was that with the words you used i felt the message EASE thru, i mean that was slick man,pretty good,
its crazy man cause your structure is WAAAAYYYY diff than your other drops but the flow was constant
solid verse over alll
Peace


P.S:at ICE, dude wen you put it like that it makes me guilty as fuck cause i just luv the creative section man its the only place that I'd visit 3 times a day,but i've been havin ma exams lately and havnt had the chance to come on here and show respect,just wanted you to know that its sick that you come on in everyday and do your bit .
i'ma try and do mine wen ever i can brotha

[Solace]

As Ice said, im glad you posted something up. As usual i gotta say i really liked it. Concept was good, the flow was excellent when i rapped to it, and the lyrics were consistent.

I gotta say overall 8.5/10

Im glad you say youll probably be using this piece.

[JMG]

that was dope man

[Requiem]

And yeah Ice, I've been paying attention to who's dropping what, haha.

lol, we the three heads right now. like three nominees for an Academy Award

P.S:at ICE, dude wen you put it like that it makes me guilty as fuck cause i just luv the creative section man its the only place that I'd visit 3 times a day,but i've been havin ma exams lately and havnt had the chance to come on here and show respect,just wanted you to know that its sick that you come on in everyday and do your bit .
i'ma try and do mine wen ever i can brotha

didn't mean to make u feel guilty, i'm just saying the three most active artists right now are me, shady, and steve. u owned everybody like in june/july. i started getting pretty active like september/october. steve's always around, and shady's been really active october/november.

As Ice said

ha ha ha, everyone quoted me good drop steve, it's good to see some excitement in the creative writing section.

i dub this month the "Re Birth" of the creative writing thread

[Ka0t1c]

some parts threw me off but it's a good drop, i just didn't like when u used the same words multiple times

it needs some more work but it's definitely a keeper

i give it a 7/10

[Slim Zaddy]

ya man that shit was sick .. flow was okay ,, lyrics are good .. concept is great ,, so i did really like it .. good job .. keep dropping ..

[Arabian Shady]

didn't mean to make u feel guilty, i'm just saying the three most active artists right now are me, shady, and steve. u owned everybody like in june/july. i started getting pretty active like september/october. steve's always around, and shady's been really active october/november.

lol its good to feel guilty if its in an eye openin way, and yeah i did rule for a while,lol
fukin mid terms cant post no more
peace

sorrie for fukin up your thread steve

[Steve Spag]

sorrie for fukin up your thread steve

Haha, no worries dude, it's alllll goooood.

Thanks for all the feed guys, much respect.