Lyrical shit

[Emadyville]

This I thin will be my last released recorded shit before my album, which will be recorded in about 3 weeks and released later on, like 7 weeks maybe or something, anyway trying to get some feedback.

You all better be ready to witness the sickest,
Most twisted in-this come visit the trickiest,
I stick-ta-this cause it’s my business to pick-this,
As every disc-is with linguistics exquisite,
Yeah I done did-it come get-it who want it,
I live it and come from it, so if you confronted,
I’ll straight murder this tape further and dump-on-it,
Just jump-on-it and leave every chump lumped-on-it,
I’ve pumped-on-it everything from this dudes-on-it,
I’m the new chronic ready to “leave” you despondent,
The respondent couldn’t breathe believe phonics,
Are deep-on-it, feeling froggy, leap-on-it,
You’d just speak-on-it when all I do is bleed-on-it,
I feed-on-it, it’s my breathe I breath-on-it,
The rest make me hit the snooze I sleep-on-it,
I can keep-on-it, or switch to straight rhymes,
If it’s the case my great lines will make your fate mine,
I’m ruthless when I do-this, music so exclusive,
Deduce-it and you can’t reduce-it to stupid,
Cause I move-with the truest so if the fuse-lit,
My movements produce-shit you get confused-with,
So in turn you lose-hits when you talk with loose-lips,
About driving deuce-whips and how you shoot-clips,
It makes some dudes-flip but I just excuse-it,
Talk on youtube clips when you’re just some toothpicks,
And I’m the true-shit with this pen never loose-grip,
Or loose sight in the booth-spit, cash out and move-chips,
I’m the truth-it’s so real bombs make your roof-split,
You all missed the boat and now I move on cruise ships,
And if this isn’t proof-shit I might just fuckin lose-it,
And if it’s about units then I ask you to prove-it,
Since you know it’s all skill then you stay reclusive,
And you better, this track I just did lacerate,
At a faster-rate so pass-the-hate in fact I’m past-the-hate,
I’ve been ready blow like all I do is masturbate,
Nah I don’t do it solo so I find girls to collaborate,
That’s the truth, my dictionary does not fabricate,
But it does fascinate, goddamn how do I rap it great,
I asked my girl she doesn’t care as long as I wrap it great,
In fact I calibrate that this did nothing but captivate,
How can you judge this when I’m the damn magistrate,
How am I this good maybe you should start askin-great,
Great will tell you I never entered I just passed-the-gate,
Walked to phenomenal, they let me in I was never asked-to-wait,
I was the only one in there so I just partied and crashed-the-place,
If I continue to write like this I can’t even grasp-my-fate,
And the CD’s coming people I believe you just grabbed the bait…

[MC Anonymous]

Excellent!!!!! The flow was impeccable, vocab was spot on, rhymes were sick!
No flaws what-so-ever.

Great job

[<Stiiccy>]

woah dude the first 7 lines are unfuckwidable...
you are the best in creative writing by far

[Emadyville]

Thanks Anonymous and Sticcy, I just sat to write and knew I had to get super lyrical, that took about 45 minutes lol I wish I could write like that all the time.

[Emadyville]

bumpin it i added to the ending

[Emadyville]

Sick shit man, I liked it

Topic: meh

but sick rhymes

It was just meant to be a lyrical mindfuck basically lol, glad you liked it

[Arabian Shady]

no doubt the first 10 bars were insane brotha,
seriously impressive, but i felt that the ego tistic thing just went ON and ON and ON, i mean i dont wana hate but i felt that it was a little too much.
the rhymes were sick , no question but it kinda dragged at the end (last 7-8 bars) i mean its cool to come up with sick shit like this , basically make an "ego" track but you might wana work on its length
its all constructive man,straight rapper to rapper criticism
Peace

[JMG]

damn that was dope.

I’m the truth-it’s so real bombs make your roof-split,
You all missed the boat and now I move on cruise ships,

I’ve been ready blow like all I do is masturbate,
Nah I don’t do it solo so I find girls to collaborate,

loved them lines..

[mcZu]

That shit was more then ill....
Fucking awesome, sick ass vocab


Enjoyed it, can't wait to hear it

[theJFKshow]

substance

[Emadyville]

no doubt the first 10 bars were insane brotha,
seriously impressive, but i felt that the ego tistic thing just went ON and ON and ON, i mean i dont wana hate but i felt that it was a little too much.
the rhymes were sick , no question but it kinda dragged at the end (last 7-8 bars) i mean its cool to come up with sick shit like this , basically make an "ego" track but you might wana work on its length
its all constructive man,straight rapper to rapper criticism
Peace

Hey man I appreciate your feedback, yeah it might of been a little much, but this seriously came off the top for the most part, just flowing and shit, and I wanted something lyrical and this did it, so hopefully it won't sound so bad recorded.

[Emadyville]

The topic/content is HORRIBLE. Seriously. Buuut, the rhyme scheme, flow and vocabulary are excellent. If you can put this kind of thought in to an actual song, it would be a straight hit.

Haha yo damn everyone's hating lol, I just wanted this to be a sick lyrical verse to record before the album, I have 3 other songs with meaning and topics that will also come out, this is just meant to be lyrical, I wrote this in 45 minutes, I'm glad people think the flow, vocab, and rhymes are sick tho cause that's what I was going for. I appreciate the comments tho, especially from you McMaybe, Idk if you ever commented on my shit

[Ka0t1c]

pretty lyrical and flowed well but i didn't like it enough to be put into an actual song

[Emadyville]

pretty lyrical and flowed well but i didn't like it enough to be put into an actual song

Well sorry it's looking like it is, thanks for checking it tho maybe you'll like it more when it's recorded