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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Solace » Nov 15th, '08, 19:58

z_em wrote:man u did take your time to come up wit a good piece of writing ,, they did mention some staff about your chorus before ,, but looking at it know .. it looks hot and cool for me .. so i like it though ,, talking about the verses ,, i liked the 1st more rather than the 2nd ,, the 1st is sick in term of flow and rhymes ,, but the 2nd was off in some areas ,, n u were repeating words like ( loose twice ) ( shit three times at the end of each sentence ) i don’t know but if u pick other words that could rhymed with them is better than repeating them .. so gd post man ,, overall 8/10 :y:

Thanks man, couldnt ask for anything better. The reason i rhymed "shit" 3 times is cause 1 of them is i rhyme it like in an accent so it fits well. Im glad you liked it, it takes me about 20-30 minutes to write my pieces, so i guess that would be a good amount for you too.

Lol @ Kez. Isnt that pic from the zelda cartoon er something :unsure:
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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Solace » Nov 15th, '08, 20:04

Chet Starr wrote:it's from a old horrible Zelda game that is often considered one of the worst games ever

:( I'm such a geek (beats self up)

i never knew it was possible to have a horrible zelda game...:'(
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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Kez » Nov 15th, '08, 20:19

shadymademe wrote:
Chet Starr wrote:it's from a old horrible Zelda game that is often considered one of the worst games ever

:( I'm such a geek (beats self up)

i never knew it was possible to have a horrible zelda game...:'(


Well CD-i managed it.
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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 15th, '08, 20:55

lmao dude that was hilarious, i liked the fact that you acknowledged the sudden ego thing, but still kept it on track, i think its a fun track 2 do,flow was sick, no probs with that, humour was top notch(i've told you that like a gazillion times,lol)
i liked it man, every couple of posts, a drop like this shows creative humour,which in itself is genius
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luv the ball scratching line!!!!
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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Solace » Nov 15th, '08, 20:59

Arabian Shady wrote:lmao dude that was hilarious, i liked the fact that you acknowledged the sudden ego thing, but still kept it on track, i think its a fun track 2 do,flow was sick, no probs with that, humour was top notch(i've told you that like a gazillion times,lol)
i liked it man, every couple of posts, a drop like this shows creative humour,which in itself is genius
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luv the ball scratching line!!!!

Thanks a lot man :worship: Everyone needs something like this ;) Im glad you liked it.
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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Requiem » Nov 16th, '08, 22:28

Ur the punchline rap has been missing :o the rap game is seriously lacking right now. it's sites like this that let us know that there's still real rap out there.

good drop shadymademe. almost 3 pgs of posts. :confusion: hot dog
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Re: NEW - Couple Screws Loose

Postby Solace » Nov 17th, '08, 00:10

IceKilla wrote:Ur the punchline rap has been missing :o the rap game is seriously lacking right now. it's sites like this that let us know that there's still real rap out there.

good drop shadymademe. almost 3 pgs of posts. :confusion: hot dog

lmao thanks...yet again? :D
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