NEW - Hit Em Up 3 (Revising)

[Solace]

I was looking over that old Hit Em Up 3 and i had to re-do it.

[Verse 1]
First off, fuck your trash talk, cause its useless,
Rhymes hitting so hard you gettin bruises,
My rhymes are like a knife, and your getting stabbed,
Ya wife says shes doing late shifts, well shes getting nabbed,
Same thing with ya mama, you said you fucked mine,
Well look at the karma, hittin' you harder than my lines,
You & ya crew, go ahead, sucker punch me,
Doesn't change the fact that my shit is bumping,
Gunna shoot me? Well don't just start saying,
That shit never happened, and im still waiting,
Cause my life is a waste, so I dont care if I'm wasted,
I'm going to die happy, if I'm placed among the greatest,
So to all you haters lemme have a word with you,
It aint biased, its a fact, yo I just flipped you,
I just took a shit on you, your burning now cause i lit you,
Dont gotta act like a bitch dude, the battles done with you.

[Chorus]
Cause im hitting it up like Em & 2Pac,
Punching a bit harder than Jay-Z & Nas,
This aint no beef its just a fucking pussy,
Who cant stand me so he just tries to push me.

[Verse 2]
So when you see Epiphany rolling down ya block,
Grab a strap on cause you aint got no cock,
You fucking critics thought i was finished,
Well there aint gunna be a day when Epiphany's diminished,
So im kicking it up just a little higher,
To write a diss all of these writers who are just biters,
My articulate lines literally smoke faggots like cigarettes,
My rhymes are so hot my tongue burns when im spitting it,
You ugly motherfucker you mama wont even kiss you,
Anyone with eyes be wishing they could kill you,
So lets finish it, just you and me,
One on one, head to head, youll get beat and beat,
By an atrocious emcee who dont ever flee a fight,
With a light hitting child, who likes to bite,
This shit is lightweight, like Nas versin Wayne,
Rakim versing Game, annihilating these bitches with my flame,
Haha I hit em up!

[Chorus x2]

[Solace]

I liked it man

Verse 1 was catchy, and the chorus was pretty good.

I'll read verse 2 when it's done

Thanks, ill finish verse 2 today just right now im lazy. Im gunna use a better vocab in verse 2 when its done since ive been told time and time again i need better vocab

Hope you like its turnout

edit: its done but im not impressed with myself. I think i can do better. I feel like that second verse was just forced, so ill end up either re-doing it or adding a 3rd verse. What you guys think?

[Slim Zaddy]

I was looking over that old Hit Em Up 3 and i had to re-do it.

[Verse 1]
same thing with ya mama, you said you fucked mine,
well look at the karma, it hit you harder than my lines,

[Chorus]

Cause im hitting it up like Em & 2Pac,
Punching a bit harder than Jay-Z & Nas,
This aint no beef its just a fucking pussy,
Who cant stand me so he just tries to push me.

[Verse 2]
So when you see Epiphany rolling down ya block,
Grab a strap on cause you aint got no cock,
You fucking critics thought i was finished,
Well there aint gunna be a day when Epiphany's diminished,
So im kicking it up just a little higher,
To write a diss all of these writers who are just biters,
My articulate lines literally smoke faggots like cigarettes,
My rhymes are so hot my tongue burns when im spitting it,

Well i know that's not your best, cuz u have done a lot more better than this before..

These are the lines that i liked the most.. Chorus was pretty cool it's good .. mentioning verses well honestly i didn’t feel the first verse after the first 4 lines it terms of rhymes and flow was off at same parts but the concept is great ,, but if try to make it a little bit more rhymed it will be wicked ..

And as i said to you before i always like your second verses , well dont worry about pushing rhymes or etc... Cuz really it's awesome.. i like it a lot .. Rhymes and flow were decent ,lyrically great.. So gd luck man, keep dropping..

[Solace]

I was looking over that old Hit Em Up 3 and i had to re-do it.

[Verse 1]
same thing with ya mama, you said you fucked mine,
well look at the karma, it hit you harder than my lines,

[Chorus]

Cause im hitting it up like Em & 2Pac,
Punching a bit harder than Jay-Z & Nas,
This aint no beef its just a fucking pussy,
Who cant stand me so he just tries to push me.

[Verse 2]
So when you see Epiphany rolling down ya block,
Grab a strap on cause you aint got no cock,
You fucking critics thought i was finished,
Well there aint gunna be a day when Epiphany's diminished,
So im kicking it up just a little higher,
To write a diss all of these writers who are just biters,
My articulate lines literally smoke faggots like cigarettes,
My rhymes are so hot my tongue burns when im spitting it,

Well i know that's not your best, cuz u have done a lot more better than this before..

These are the lines that i liked the most.. Chorus was pretty cool it's good .. mentioning verses well honestly i didn’t feel the first verse after the first 4 lines it terms of rhymes and flow was off at same parts but the concept is great ,, but if try to make it a little bit more rhymed it will be wicked ..

And as i said to you before i always like your second verses , well dont worry about pushing rhymes or etc... Cuz really it's awesome.. i like it a lot .. Rhymes and flow were decent ,lyrically great.. So gd luck man, keep dropping..

Thanks man, im happy you checked it. For the it flows great when i rap it to the Hit Em Up instrumental so im not sure about that. The rhymes ill try to improve them. I actually thought the first verse was way better than the second so i was gunna scrap the second one, i guess i shouldnt. It rhymed to me fine too, dont see which rhymes didnt rhyme in my piece. Oh yeah and from verse 2, i loved that smoke faggots like cigarettes, tongue burns while im spitting it line, so im glad you liked it too!

I hope when im done revising itll be better man!

[Slim Zaddy]

I was looking over that old Hit Em Up 3 and i had to re-do it.

[Verse 1]
same thing with ya mama, you said you fucked mine,
well look at the karma, it hit you harder than my lines,

[Chorus]

Cause im hitting it up like Em & 2Pac,
Punching a bit harder than Jay-Z & Nas,
This aint no beef its just a fucking pussy,
Who cant stand me so he just tries to push me.

[Verse 2]
So when you see Epiphany rolling down ya block,
Grab a strap on cause you aint got no cock,
You fucking critics thought i was finished,
Well there aint gunna be a day when Epiphany's diminished,
So im kicking it up just a little higher,
To write a diss all of these writers who are just biters,
My articulate lines literally smoke faggots like cigarettes,
My rhymes are so hot my tongue burns when im spitting it,

Well i know that's not your best, cuz u have done a lot more better than this before..

These are the lines that i liked the most.. Chorus was pretty cool it's good .. mentioning verses well honestly i didn’t feel the first verse after the first 4 lines it terms of rhymes and flow was off at same parts but the concept is great ,, but if try to make it a little bit more rhymed it will be wicked ..

And as i said to you before i always like your second verses , well dont worry about pushing rhymes or etc... Cuz really it's awesome.. i like it a lot .. Rhymes and flow were decent ,lyrically great.. So gd luck man, keep dropping..

Thanks man, im happy you checked it. For the it flows great when i rap it to the Hit Em Up instrumental so im not sure about that. The rhymes ill try to improve them. I actually thought the first verse was way better than the second so i was gunna scrap the second one, i guess i shouldnt. It rhymed to me fine too, dont see which rhymes didnt rhyme in my piece. Oh yeah and from verse 2, i loved that smoke faggots like cigarettes, tongue burns while im spitting it line, so im glad you liked it too!

I hope when im done revising itll be better man!

common man i always checked yours .. cuz i like your way of writing ,, well i comment on it without mentioning the instrumental that ur usin ,, so if it flow well for you then it's sick .. cuz on a beat they will be sounded differently for sure . Maybe the second verse dont fit in your beat that's way u dont like it .. maybe wit a different beat it will sound great .. so scrap it if u feel it dont fit . but use it in other beat ,, cuz it's sick bro .. when u finish recording it . tell me cuz i wanna hear it .. okay pal .. ..

[Solace]

common man i always checked yours .. cuz i like your way of writing ,, well i comment on it without mentioning the instrumental that ur usin ,, so if it flow well for you then it's sick .. cuz on a beat they will be sounded differently for sure . Maybe the second verse dont fit in your beat that's way u dont like it .. maybe wit a different beat it will sound great .. so scrap it if u feel it dont fit . but use it in other beat ,, cuz it's sick bro .. when u finish recording it . tell me cuz i wanna hear it .. okay pal .. ..

Thanks man, i wanna record it too! 2nd verse fits fine its just that i felt like i could have done better. I wanted to use a better vocab for the 2nd verse but i didnt use many words that i dont usually use (i only used like atrocious & articulate). Im glad you thought it was some sick stuff. Im waiting on a drop from you too, peacee