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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 23rd, '08, 04:13

McMaybe wrote:The flow is very complicated, lot's of speed ups and slow downs. Lyrics have meaning, if you don't understand ask and I will gladly explain. Thanks for checking

I'm assertive, crazy... entertainments curtain-raiser,
words of praise and working basic circuitry... I'm entertainments worst abrasive,
person... this catastrophe is past the beats.. we're paying for it,
training soldiers... more green waisted than the rain forest...
sewage mouthed... the youth developed usage at a faster pace,
digest the knowledge properly, don't chew the wisdom, masticate...
fasten patience, patiently get past the past and task your fate,
a drastic waist of act is past through activeness of actors, games,
develop wisdom, use your passion trash the crafts of television,
all this plastic-ism, empty cans, movie magic sex descriptions...
exposition-ed... she has no clue what color hair she has...
and scared to tell her fam shes pregnant... dad? no name just aries...
whats scarier is people misinterpret music... used to beat,
monotony, instead it's abused... not used to fuel the free...
it's in it's perfect... words could not describe the feeling, this is me...
I'm worth a listen, turn the tape and vibe to lines of words I breath.

A lot of hidden meaning in this, I like the political statements you made. The rhymes were nice, as was the vocab. 9/10. =D
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 23rd, '08, 04:19

McMaybe wrote:Thanks man ^^ We should collaborate on a piece sometime.

That would be great! I'm down for whenever you would like to collab.
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby Solace » Nov 23rd, '08, 05:46

McMaybe MC Anonymous collab :o Thatd be some fuckin fire
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby Steve Spag » Nov 23rd, '08, 06:19

God I'm glad to be working with you, lol.
You already know what I think, but always gotta show my respect on the forum, haha.
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 23rd, '08, 06:24

that was great like 83/100
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby 4D » Nov 23rd, '08, 12:38

Good stuff there Mc Maybe. Flow was nasty it worked fine for me reading it. There was definitely some deeper meaning to a lot of those lines, great vocab and complexity, and some nice multi's. Loved it. :y:
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby Solace » Nov 23rd, '08, 17:49

Great piece from what ive understood. Flow was insane, nice vocab. :y: I just didnt get these:

"no name just aries..."

and

"sewage mouthed... the youth developed usage at a faster pace,
digest the knowledge properly, don't chew the wisdom, masticate..."

^is that one saying youth swears too much and uses words they dont even know the meaning of?

Anyways, great piece, 9/10. :worship:
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby Solace » Nov 23rd, '08, 18:22

McMaybe wrote:
shadymademe wrote:Great piece from what ive understood. Flow was insane, nice vocab. :y: I just didnt get these:

"no name just aries..."

and

"sewage mouthed... the youth developed usage at a faster pace,
digest the knowledge properly, don't chew the wisdom, masticate..."

^is that one saying youth swears too much and uses words they dont even know the meaning of?

Anyways, great piece, 9/10. :worship:



aries is like a sign (those yearly astrological signs)... so like, shes pregnant, she doesn't know anything about the day but his sign.

sewage mouthed... the youth developed usage at a faster pace,
digest the knowledge properly, don't chew the wisdom, masticate...

It means that kids speaking ahead of their times... talking about politics and whatever, and they're to young to chew the knowledge.

Thanks for the feed man ^^


Ah thanks for the explanation, and your welcome :happy:
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby mcZu » Nov 23rd, '08, 18:52

It's a great piece, but the flow looks very complicated....
Nice vocab, likd the rhyme pattern, complexity is sick :y:
Can't wait to hear it, curious about the flow :b:
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby James R. » Dec 2nd, '08, 18:38

You already know what I'm gonna say man. This is fucking DOPE. I love your shit, man. Keep it comin
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Re: Suckers (double verse)

Postby SajN » Dec 2nd, '08, 19:29

James R. wrote:You already know what I'm gonna say man. This is fucking DOPE. I love your shit, man. Keep it comin
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