Re: untitled [for now]

by **tjb** » Nov 24th, '08, 01:09

yo this is a work in progreess this wat i got so far..
chorus:

st- st stand tall [ background] an ill stay ready
nuh- nuh nvr fall [background] an ill stay steady
*repeat x3
verse 1:
keep ya head up when times get rough
cuz goin through this shit it makes u tough
reroute ya route u on the wrong road
ill close up the gate u cant cross the mote
cant cross the water cant swim ull drown
yea ull get slaughtered nvr liv it down
im the next big thing, dare i say
not tht its a good thing, the way the games goin
flew by so fast they outta gas its slowin
down an i feel for the up hill slope
an i grab for anything but nothings there
fallin back down through beatless air
just to think i was almost in the clare
gu- gu guess i gotta prepare, for a rap recession
an its clear r progressions halted, tht was sorta my fear
chorus x3

by **tjb** » Nov 24th, '08, 01:12

o yea feedbak appreciated

by **Ka0t1c** » Nov 24th, '08, 03:32

it's good... i see you have potential to up ur skills a bit, it seems like you know what you're looking for and i am confident you'll find the right words to use t express it more in depth.

by **tjb** » Nov 24th, '08, 12:45

thanx for advice

by **tjb** » Nov 25th, '08, 01:04

yo ill work on this some more later if anybod cares :8)

Website · by **Solace** » Nov 25th, '08, 02:23

im an asshole and im too lazy to check it out, so please when its done PM me and ill check it man, i promise :flower:

by **tjb** » Nov 25th, '08, 02:40

ha alright

by **tjb** » Nov 26th, '08, 01:56

stop the rhymes for a sec just listen up
ill let the beat drop and tell u wats up
if theres a beat to be made make it about somethin
cuz nothing aint gangsta nothin just bluffin
these rappas is boring leaving me snoring
i <3 how they claim they got fans so adoring
but they dont an thye wont till they get real
like me and they gain a lil sex appeal
get it up get it down from side to side
lil wayne listens to me runs and hides
ha i think im done i hit the breaks
the point of my rhyme im sick of u fakes

chorusx3

by **tjb** » Nov 26th, '08, 15:26

listen to my vision my vison so clear
cuz if em dont release soon the apoc is near
an hip hop just might bite the dust
so listen to my motions my devotion
to the thrust to the beat to the words
move ya feet to ma words an if im soundin absurd
fuck dat ill throw a curve yea but i flow fast
as lighnting its a lil bit frightning but ill stay mellow for
this psa cuz im not in the mood to ruffle feathers today
chorus x3

by **tjb** » Nov 26th, '08, 15:27

st- st stand tall [ background] an ill stay ready
nuh- nuh nvr fall [background] an ill stay steady
*repeat x3
verse 1:
keep ya head up when times get rough
cuz goin through this shit it makes u tough
reroute ya route u on the wrong road
ill close up the gate u cant cross the mote
cant cross the water cant swim ull drown
yea ull get slaughtered nvr liv it down
im the next big thing, dare i say
not tht its a good thing, the way the games goin
flew by so fast they outta gas its slowin
down an i feel for the up hill slope
an i grab for anything but nothings there
fallin back down through beatless air
just to think i was almost in the clare
gu- gu guess i gotta prepare, for a rap recession
an its clear r progressions halted, tht was sorta my fear
chorus x3
stop the rhymes for a sec just listen up
ill let the beat drop and tell u wats up
if theres a beat to be made make it about somethin
cuz nothing aint gangsta nothin just bluffin
these rappas is boring leaving me snoring
i <3 how they claim they got fans so adoring
but they dont an thye wont till they get real
like me and they gain a lil sex appeal
get it up get it down from side to side
lil wayne listens to me runs and hides
ha i think im done i hit the breaks
the point of my rhyme im sick of u fakes

chorusx3
isten to my vision my vison so clear
cuz if em dont release soon the apoc is near
an hip hop just might bite the dust
so listen to my motions my devotion
to the thrust to the beat to the words
move ya feet to ma words an if im soundin absurd
fuck dat ill throw a curve yea but i flow fast
as lighnting its a lil bit frightning but ill stay mellow for
this psa cuz im not in the mood to ruffle feathers today
chorus x3