Freestyle

[Solace]

Freestyle i spit and tried to remember the lines, got most of them down tho.

Lyrics are distorted, your mama is a whore and,
you have less of a chance than my baby that my girl aborted,
wow, i just bit a line from the high and mighty,
you dont like it? come here and fight me,
cum here girl lemme give you some icing,
on your nice cake, while im writing,
or spitting, or shitting, or whenever,
we goin fuck around forever,
so never say never cause me and Ice together,
gunna rip your skin off and turn it into leather.

[MC Anonymous]

For a freestyle is alright... sub-par at best.
I'm sorry for being a dick, it has to be said for growth.
One of your more illuminating drawbacks is the lack of vocabulary.
You need to add more multi's and punchlines. Give the reader/listener something to be like, wow.
The flow was real good, structure was there.
I'd give this a 6.5 . Keep up the growth bro, peace.

[Solace]

It was just something that i was like joking around with, not trying to impress, and i havent done shit in the creative writing section in a while so i posted it^

Thanks for checking, dont think a person needs vocabulary to be great tho, im glad the flow was good and the structure too. Thanks

[Requiem]

thought last two lines were most structured, cuz it was complicated, and had good rhymes.

[Solace]

thought last two lines were most structured, cuz it was complicated, and had good rhymes.

Thanks, and if you get a chance could you recheck my punchline practice?

[Slim Zaddy]

It’s good .. and ya i agree ,, u don’t need much vocab to impress .. It’s not necessarily.. i liked the last line 2 .. good drop though

[Solace]

It’s good .. and ya i agree ,, u don’t need much vocab to impress .. It’s not necessarily.. i liked the last line 2 .. good drop though

Thanks man, i bit off Eminem tho in the freestyle

i think it was eminems Encore: "So never say never cause shady aftermath together..."

[lilrossy]

i thought it started alright (i liked the 2nd line) and it finished good aswell, but through the middle i lost interest. But for a freestyle it was alright.

[Solace]

i thought it started alright (i liked the 2nd line) and it finished good aswell, but through the middle i lost interest. But for a freestyle it was alright.

Thanks, i know my freestyle wasnt great but im just a horrible freestyler.

[James R.]

I didn't like it. Couldn't really figure out what type of flow you were using. Nothing really special. Last two lines were the best probably, but they were average. Not bad if you weren't taking it seriously, but keep practicing anyways.

[Solace]

I didn't like it. Couldn't really figure out what type of flow you were using. Nothing really special. Last two lines were the best probably, but they were average. Not bad if you weren't taking it seriously, but keep practicing anyways.

Thanks, and yeah i wasnt taking it seriously. When i wanna try something, ill write not spit off the dome