cheddar - new shit

[Slim Zaddy]

Verse: 1
There‘s a boy named cheddar, I want him shred up,
I won’t get up chump, till I get what I came for, so end this shit up dump,
You think you’re better; I will shatter your heart, and leave your insensible feeling scatter,
Now I’m feelin better, I didn’t waste my time on you so I’m feelin hotter,
I end up scorched your blood on a blotter, just to get a taste sweater,
In mean time I’m a admonishing all your guys, stay away from me let them disguise,
Let them for a once think wise, their life upon you based on lies ain’t right,
I’m not a kinda of guy who denies the hoi polloi who I feel toward despise,
I always improvise harsh surprises, in which arises in front of cross one's eyes,
I ‘m a need a bullet, I’m gonna pull it from your heart, and let you chew it,
I hate u don’t you get it, I’m gonna let u sink in your blood till u hide in it,
That’s your life is it, spit the worst of it, b4 I put u in a grave, nd bury u inside in it,
Man I can’t stand ya I admit it , I’m a gonna slit your throat nd jus say a decrepit lunatic did it,

Chorus
It’s my life I had to, respect it,.
Success opportunities are just ,neglected,.
Failure, well i can always expect it
It’s my damn life man, I can’t reject it.


Verse: 2
Sometimes I fell like the world on my shoulders, stop givin me orders,
I go through all life tribulation get out tough rough, like I’m suppose does,
Sometimes life extorts us, and shows us the real strife which’s meant for us,
Till I become all da time shown ignorance, life need endurance,
Hate and love are not in your hand, and it’s not a feelin to demand,
It’s a misunderstand inside your head, let it go let it spread bighead,
Sometimes you feel shit, you become sick of it, u feel like that’s it,
You sit beside a snitch bitch, telling you fibs about a guy called Mitch,
Well I’m a put this in mind for a while, later on let it glide out of my sight till it wipes,
Talking about my carrier side, I always feel like I’m gonna success but it’s all lies,
Sometimes I look for shit around me, I feel like there’re still some people below me,
Then a good feeling getting out off me, spreading all the shit out of me,

[Chorus]

[Solace]

Nice piece man, fave piece from you so far. I think the chorus can be fixed a bit, it should be

"Failure, well i can always expect it."

Instead of

"Failure is what I always, expect it"

The rest was great. Keep it up. I liked all your multies man, i think this is your best piece actually, not just my favourite. Just didnt get this line, kinda threw me off for verse 2:

"I go through all life tribulation get out tough rough, like I’m suppose does,"

Like you "suppose does"? What does that mean?

[Slim Zaddy]

Nice piece man, fave piece from you so far. I think the chorus can be fixed a bit, it should be

"Failure, well i can always expect it."

Instead of

"Failure is what I always, expect it"

The rest was great. Keep it up. I liked all your multies man, i think this is your best piece actually, not just my favourite. Just didnt get this line, kinda threw me off for verse 2:

"I go through all life tribulation get out tough rough, like I’m suppose does,"

Like you "suppose does"? What does that mean?

i'm so glad u like it man , nd glad u like the multies .. ,, about the chorus i will fix it as u said .. i always take your critics in consider .. ,, about that line "I go through all life tribulation get out tough rough, like I’m suppose does," is that i get out if these tabulations , like i'm suppose does mean is that ,the way that i should do it or go after it the way that I should proceed with it .. in which is be to patient nd look for hope.. etc... I hope I clear my idea.. Thanks for checking it out bro .. .. waitin for you to finish recording hit em up 3 ...

[Slim Zaddy]

i will appreciate more feedback