Teenagers Life Pt. II

[lilrossy]

Decided to write 3 verses for teenagers life. Posted the first not to long ago. just quickly wrote the 2nd one then. also made up a chorus for it, let me know what you think.

testosterone-tweaked is how our feelings bcum excrete,
street manner & volatile aggression, the way we speak,
dis self image that we seek to make us feel complete,
got us livin on da street wit da cold concrete on our feet,
we've been defeated by these lives that we've created,
dis generation is treacherous & our lives have degraded,
invaded by sex, drugs 'n' alcohol & what we've made it,
bcuz of it we've faded, our lives are so over rated,
problems inflate, its like lifes a dog & were da bone,
we get thrashed 'n' throwned & bashed to the bone,
like a cyclone our feelings & thoughts get flown,
until the day we lose our home or worse be disowned,
u've been ranted at to ya face & u feel ur at rock bottom,
of all da problems in dis place, u feel dat chu got 'em,
dats were da drugs 'n' alcohol cum into play, u jus want 'em
suicidal thoughts goin through ya brain, ur lifes jus rotton.

Fight after fight, gettin into strife,
tears on my pillow each 'n' every night,
pray to god 'n' cry, is it goin be alright,
these are just the days of a teenagers life.

[neversnooze]

damn man this was some good shit. flowed from beginning to end. i liked how you described a teenagers life. we all overwhelm at some point, and all you can do is keep on fighting.


good write man or women

[lilrossy]

thanks alot man. im glad you liked it.
(ima man by the way)

[Steve Spag]

Pretty good drop man. Liked the message to it, and your vocab. was nice and fresh. Flowed pretty well the way I read it.

Keep it up!

[Ice_Scarred]

Thats some tight stuff, man. Your rhyme scheme is crazy! A lot of that is true about Teens in the world. Some deep shit, dude.
like a cyclone our feelings & thoughts get flown,
until the day we lose our home or worse be disowned,
My favorite part. Your whole structure was dope, to say the least. I'm looking forward to more of your work!

[lilrossy]

thanks for checkin it out and leavin sum feedbak guys, really appreciate it. I'll b starting on verse 3 soon, b sure to check it out.