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Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 13:54

Leathal flows that glow with golden aura's of light
despite darkness or fright, it fights the horror's of night
terror delights the fall of humanity, as I call the reality
an appauled actuality converted into walls of insanity
when I saw the gravity, I knew my mind's matrix expanded
and I got tormented for I denied what the sadists demanded
take this handed wisdom, and enter the kingdom of knowledge
when you enter you are gifted with the freedom of prophets
when you see them, the unidentified flying objects, duck and cover
it takes that luck of lovers to get sucked like others
I travel through dimensional planes with conventional aim
to gain lyricist game, in three dimensional frames
my throat explodes due to heat, spittin' flames that are blue at least
bringin' the carcass of hip-hop to my crib so the crew can feast
the truest piece of literature is covered with wild ceramics
rippin' fabrics of space and in the air like aerodynamics
and my mind can't stand it, I begin to develop brain damage
writing is my only advantage over this insane savage
I will never die, time stops for me so I will never be 'late'
and unless you came from my dick then you will never relate.
Last edited by MC Anonymous on Dec 13th, '08, 19:28, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Rhymes

Postby SajN » Dec 13th, '08, 14:27

It was a sick drop!
It flows good.

I love the beginning, but afterwards it gets "weaker" but it's still sick!

The first two lines: :worship:
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Re: Rhymes

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 14:30

SajN wrote:It was a sick drop!
It flows good.

I love the beginning, but afterwards it gets "weaker" but it's still sick!

The first two lines: :worship:

Thanks bro, :y:
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Re: Rhymes

Postby mcZu » Dec 13th, '08, 18:40

Nice, great rhymes, nice structure, the complexity is awesome :y:

I will never die, time stops for me so I will never be 'late'
and unless you came from my dick then you will never relate.


Probz for the ending line :b:
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Re: Rhymes

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 18:42

mcZu wrote:Nice, great rhymes, nice structure, the complexity is awesome :y:

I will never die, time stops for me so I will never be 'late'
and unless you came from my dick then you will never relate.


Probz for the ending line :b:

Thanks bro, :y:
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Re: Rhymes

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 13th, '08, 19:18

great :y: :y: one problem tho, "matrix"
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Rhymes

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 19:22

Kaotic wrote:great :y: :y: one problem tho, "matrix"

what's wrong with matrix?
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Postby mcZu » Dec 13th, '08, 19:26

^You spelled it wrong
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Re: Rhymes

Postby Solace » Dec 13th, '08, 19:27

Ohhhh those last lines were fire :worship: And yeah you spelled it "martix"
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Re: Rhymes

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 19:28

mcZu wrote:^You spelled it wrong

O_O!!!!!!!!!!
WOW! omfg ok I must fix NOW!
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Re: Rhymes

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 13th, '08, 19:32

haha! :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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