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Wasting Away

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 20th, '08, 17:27

in my head is a Dark Tone it tells me you Are Home as I slowly Recede
why did I have to See These Creepy demons threaten to Leave Me

I want their Companionship with this life Comes Damages
dealing with an Unmanaged Trip to hell this is One Mans Visit

the flames Scorch My Soul and yet ignites the Torch I Hold
some die young many More Die Old life is Short Guys So

my time is Here isn't it Wierd how I refuse to shed a Tear
pull every hair from my Beard and have my heart Pierced

my body is and has been Temporary the things you Remember Vary
to me this December's Scary cuz that'll be when this Pretenders Buried

my every Thought Is Pressed to find which point will be Plotted Next
all I smell is Rotted Flesh I feel like a psychic who just Saw His Death

your journey without me has Begun I have Succumbed and you have Won
I'm on the ledge and about to Jump so I step back and Run finally it's Done

see me lying Broken Hoping the gates of hell will Open with an huge Explosion
my remains are Soaking in a fiery Ocean burning my brain even as I'm Posting
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Re: Wasting Away

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 20th, '08, 17:35

hmm...interesting...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Wasting Away

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 20th, '08, 17:40

:y: :y: :y: :y: Great job dude.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Wasting Away

Postby mcZu » Dec 20th, '08, 18:54

Nice job man

This line killed it imo
all I smell is Rotted Flesh I feel like a psychic who just Saw His Death
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Re: Wasting Away

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 21st, '08, 17:26

this is sick man ,. i liked it all .. 9/10 .. great job ... keep droppin bro :y:
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Re: Wasting Away

Postby Arabian Shady » Dec 21st, '08, 22:51

it wasnt exactly rap, it sound more poetic, v.well written either way.
couple a strong lines, but somelines simply appear out of the blue, like these demons, was womderin wat haunts you man? cause it comes out of no where, get you thinkin.... :sweating:
neways fav line tho
my every Thought Is Pressed to find which point will be Plotted Next
all I smell is Rotted Flesh I feel like a psychic who just Saw His Death

sick!
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