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Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Boston » Dec 21st, '08, 01:41

well.since i don't post in this section anymore.. ill post a little something..
one of my emotional type songs which i love doing

going to re-record this soon on good quality.. so here it is..
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as im sitting in this empty house, yelling, scream, let me out/
all i see a deadly route, begging please get me help/
feeling ill, empty bottles, stealing pills, let me swallow/
feeling suicidal, is that a gun? fine then let me borrow/
please just let me be, knees weak, let me breathe/
a brief screech, let me speak, relieve me? let me leave/
heart pounds, start to sweat, round sounds, target dead/
we part now, meet later, greet later, the part we dread/
everybody buckle up, we all know the struggles suck/
its a matter if you can take it, n im sick of fucking up/
man i swear im done with this, someone do something quick/
before i get a bad idea, snap n just run with it/
id just wish you get a clue, tried to prove your getting through/
but in order to move forward, have to move back a step or two/
if only you believed in me, its not what it seems to be/
i dont know what to do, you dont know what this means to me/

- Josh Earle the Artist!
holla for a collab :8)
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 21st, '08, 01:55

Boston, you may not like me and I may not like you but I gotta respect your skill.
This was very good, impressed me. 8/10 :y: :y:
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Boston » Dec 21st, '08, 02:06

MC Anonymous wrote:Boston, you may not like me and I may not like you but I gotta respect your skill.
This was very good, impressed me. 8/10 :y: :y:


good looking out :y:
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Boston » Dec 21st, '08, 03:11

Ps: when i add more verses and shit, i need someone to do a nice hook, so hit me up people..it would be really appreciated.
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 21st, '08, 04:16

it's pretty good, not an 8 imo but more than a 7
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Dark Blue » Dec 21st, '08, 04:40

wow real nice, great job
HATERS If you worked your dreams like you do your mouth - things would happen for you
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Robbie G » Dec 21st, '08, 04:51

Was pretty good, Im interested in hearing it recorded.
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 21st, '08, 06:35

this was an emotional and personal piece, so I couldn't relate to it... lol
anyway keep up the good work :y:
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Boston » Dec 21st, '08, 06:57

thanks all
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 21st, '08, 18:46

feeling ill, empty bottles, stealing pills, let me swallow/
feeling suicidal, is that a gun? fine then let me borrow/
please just let me be, knees weak, let me breathe/
a brief screech, let me speak, relieve me? let me leave/

these lines are sick :y:

i like it man .. maybe cuz it's emotional nd i could relate to it in some parts .. keep it up .. good job here :y:
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Re: Trapped Inside (emotional type)

Postby Boston » Dec 21st, '08, 21:52

thanks :8)
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