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Postby Darkblade44431 » Dec 21st, '08, 03:18

Yeah this is only the best verse i've ever written. Took me quite a while. :D
I bet everyone that reads this will be jealous.


I was walking down the street and then a baby looked at me/
what the fuck you lookin at you little tiny freak?/
he then opened his mouth and growled demonic noises/
"YOU WILL DIE BEFORE THE SUNSET SHINES UPON OUR VOICES"/
"MY VOICE IS AS DARK AS MY THOUGHTS"/
"MY THOUGHTS ARE TRAPPED....IN A CLOSET!"/
i then looked around and all i saw was some undies/
noticed they were girls, bit into em like lunchmeat/
livin life as a flunky, humpty mutha fuckin dumpty!/
i fell off the wall, those assholes didn't even clean the yolk!/
Then i rose from the dead and started singing to folk/
"I AM THE LAMB OF GOD! RAMBLE ON FROM PHAROAH'S BLOGS!"/
LA LA LA LA LA LA LA LA!/
i ripped of someone's titties and i kicked in his dick/
now you lookin MORE like a mutha fuckin chick!/
you gotta STRUT like you mean it, FREE your mind!/
stick out your BUTT like you mean it, show me YOUR behind!/
i'm a fuckin cheetah girl! watch me dance around the world!/
the only hot one is the chubby blonde one!/
Raven you disgust me and damn girl, you got fat!/
and fuck the other mexican that thinks she can dance with rap/
fuck you! fuck you! and fuck you ten times over!/
me and my niggas be shootin yall bitches like it's the last day of mah life!/
LA LA LA! throw a shoe at yo mama and i'm still go'n play her tonight!/
NIGGGGGGAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!/
spittin at yo daddy while he was in the middle of laughin/
SHUT your fuckin face, "HERE BITCH!, want a napkin!?"/
i stuffed it in his mouth and he said, "what's that inside!?"/
Just a little snot for you to cherish, heh..not mine../
And i wonder why this verse took me 93 hours to write../
maybe that's cuz i get high off staring too long at the light!/
i wash myself in poop and then i take a sniff!/
eat it very slowly...don't wanna just DIG RIGHT IN!/
BOO yo mama, boo yoself, you punk ass milf!/
drink my milk from my titty and i'll pluck you a hair/
shut the fuck up now and you'll get pink eye from dairy air/
MOONED! now take a look in the morning,/
and the penis is shining, so bright..it's STILL forming!/
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!/
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Re: Untitled

Postby lilrossy » Dec 21st, '08, 12:33

no offence, but shit, if dats da best than you need mo practice. i didn't even make it halfway bcuz of boredom. flow was aight at times, but sum areas it was off. it would of been alright if it was a freestyle, but since you took ur time to write it, im gonna have to say it wasn't dat good. but hey, don't give up, keep practicing.
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Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Untitled

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 21st, '08, 17:24

some parts i liked it .. some were just off .. you got potential .. it's good though . but fix the structure man it's missed up nd flow was off at some parts .. but both way keep it up ..
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Re: Untitled

Postby Darkblade44431 » Dec 22nd, '08, 00:33

Wow.....i didn't think anyone would take this serious.... xD!!!!!!!
thanks for the comments anyways.
I made that up on the spot and purposely tried to make it fucked up and funny lolzzz
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