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Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 22nd, '08, 15:27

it's a real story it does happend to one of the women i know .. hope you will like it .. feedback would be appreciated guys

(verse1)

Here comes a little story . . . about an innocent child,
A daughter, sister, nd clubber. . for a little meant while,
But it wasn't like that.............from the very beginning,
she used to ace stats nd wear badges all over her linen,
She wasn't a book worm she was more like a centipede,
The reads just helped her escape from all of her pleads,
She wasn't skinny nor fat or have braces or glasses,
She wasn't a hoe and she didn’t like showing her assets,
So automatically that made her an outcast and a loser,
So when it came time to Prom, nobody would choose her,
Her first year at college she met a beauty in chemistry,
"Thanks for hanging out, even if you only do it to copy me,
So the two became friends nd the loser was finally accepted,
Had a make over and even a shopping spree to correct it,
Getting drunk at parties, making out with guys to prove,
She was cool for living lies nd drinking all of that booze,
She became a binge drinker and her grades became poor,
Experimented with lesbianism and then labeled a whore,
It's true and this is all very sad because basically,
NONE OF THIS COMPARES TO WHEN SHE DISCOVERED... L.S.D,



(Verse 2)

She moved slowly through the crowd, head spinning and dazed,
The illusions brought her a new life, more fittingly displayed,
Time was passing fast, and she was enjoying herself thoroughly,
She didn't realize she had dug herself a hole, and kept burrowing,
Her friends found her amusing, just kept her around for the kicks,
She didn't understand, her pals were as real as what she saw in her trips,
Lost what she once had, saying, "Fuck the future, live life in the past,
Loving drugs, screwed grades, she could never say "Oh, I think I'll pass,
She steadily grew accustomed to sleeping around and acting sleazy,
Her reputation had gone far past... "Oh her, ya dude she's easy,
She had lost appreciation for the beauty and frailty of her life,
She had lost herself to drugs, and she couldn't make it right,
Days went by, but it was like she was standing still in time,
She went further then acid, started dealing with needles and lines,
After a while, she lost control, and just couldn't take life serious,
Experimenting was over, it had all been done, how could she be curious,
If I could have been there, I know things wouldn't be like they are,
Her degree would be finished, she'd be a doctor or mapping the stars,
But life has a funny way of destroying what you have tried to make,
a sister who had left a free woman, and now she can't even escape,
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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 23rd, '08, 15:57

37 views ,, not a single feedback :confusion:
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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby lilrossy » Dec 23rd, '08, 16:02

it wasn't too bad. it was a good story and i thought u told it well. :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 24th, '08, 18:13

lilrossy wrote:it wasn't too bad. it was a good story and i thought u told it well. :y:



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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby James R. » Dec 24th, '08, 18:18

That was some great storytelling right there. And I don't know if you meant to do this, but it gave off a VERY strong message without being preachy in the slightest because of your emotion. Every line spoke verses because you were speaking something straight from the heart. You didn't need multies or complexity. You just spit it how you lived it (or how she lived it in this case) and that's the point I want everyone to get to. I really enjoyed this man. Great job.
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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 24th, '08, 18:39

James R. wrote:That was some great storytelling right there. And I don't know if you meant to do this, but it gave off a VERY strong message without being preachy in the slightest because of your emotion. Every line spoke verses because you were speaking something straight from the heart. You didn't need multies or complexity. You just spit it how you lived it (or how she lived it in this case) and that's the point I want everyone to get to. I really enjoyed this man. Great job.


thanks james .. really glad that you liked it.. nd ya it was straight from my heart . it does give a message but i did'nt do it on purpose cuz i wrote what i feel in this drop . i enjoyed writing it ,, again thanks :flower:
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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby mcZu » Dec 25th, '08, 01:32

Enjoyed the story, it kinda took you in
Lyrics could be better, still a nice job :y:
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Re: Chicks without Me ( N-E-W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 25th, '08, 17:48

McMaybe wrote:The storytelling was up there with Slick Rick and Nas. The lyrics were decent, and generally the whole song was pretty good. :y:


thanks man ,, :worship:

mcZu wrote:Enjoyed the story, it kinda took you in
Lyrics could be better, still a nice job :y:


thanks for da comment glad u liked it .. :worship:
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