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Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

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Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby James R. » Dec 26th, '08, 09:05

You drop shit like someone left your ass open/
I got the class hopin that Ima give you ya last potion/
I rap potent, grab chokin snaps, blast token blacks/
Leave neighborhoods dead or stuck with broken backs/
Not fuckin holdin back, I'm cuttin open acts/
Like I promoted the show but when you showed your flow was whack/
I grapple cats when I battle rap you aint cappin back/
I drop random knowledge like a snapple cap/
Rhymes hotter than candle wax/
If you think you rough my punches buzz and fuckin sand you flat/
Scandelous cats ramblin crap bout handlin gats/
You lost and barely had a chance to come back/
I'm gamblin change while you scramblin names/
Don't come at me cuz I assume you had to be sane/
And I don't hold you responsible/
So I'ma duck and counter your punches like a boxer do/
No obstacles I'm droppin you poppin you/
Stoppin you maybe I'll pop a glock or two/
I'm droppin hot editions, lemme make you a proposition/
ust back the fuck off and let me take the top position/

Flow is trash, but it's 3 in the morning and I felt like postin something.

Slimm and Yoshi, if you check this, no this isn't the song dedicated to you (unless you want it to be lol)
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby Rapsoldier101 » Dec 26th, '08, 09:16

James R. wrote:So I'ma duck and counter your punches like a boxer do/



thats a T.I. Line From "No Matter What"
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby James R. » Dec 26th, '08, 09:20

Rapsoldier101 wrote:
James R. wrote:So I'ma duck and counter your punches like a boxer do/



thats a T.I. Line From "No Matter What"

Thats a basic battle rap concept line lol
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 26th, '08, 11:13

i liked it .. it's nice , concept is nice nd da lyrics are good .. overall it's 8/10 .. nice job here for less than 3 minutes .. :y:
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby yoshi » Dec 26th, '08, 14:59

man, u must type so fast.. :shifty:

me and Slimm expect the song to get on top of Billboard's Hot 100 :smoking: so you better step your game up [is it even possible here?.. ] :shifty:
Maybe wrote:I'm so awesome, I don't mind looking desperate.

Chet wrote:Fuck House. If I wanted to watch a sarcastic person in the medical field, I would stalk Yoshi :8)
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby James R. » Dec 26th, '08, 17:17

Thanks Yosh and Z.

Me and Maybe were on MSN seeing how fast we could type verses, so it's not the deepest thing on the planet lol, but yeah man my fingers were on fire. Carpotunnel here I come :smoking:
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby Kez » Dec 26th, '08, 17:26

James R. wrote:
Rapsoldier101 wrote:
James R. wrote:So I'ma duck and counter your punches like a boxer do/



thats a T.I. Line From "No Matter What"

Thats a basic battle rap concept line lol


Typical kinda stuff T.I would write then, basic shit
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby Arabian Shady » Dec 26th, '08, 21:00

i didnt have any flow problems man, infact flow was quite good
wiked shit, not jaw droppingly dope but definetly worth sayin "DAYM!! this dudes sick" lmao!
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby James R. » Dec 27th, '08, 00:23

Lmao Maybe our cyphers always start out like 2-4 bars then turn into like 16 bar drops in like 3 messages on MSN

And thanks Arabian. I appreciate you check it out man.
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 27th, '08, 00:45

this is damn good for a cypher... I like how you switch it up and give it to um
your stuff is always worth checking out :y:
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Re: Less than 3 minutes (Maybe as my witness lol)

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 27th, '08, 22:25

Damn, nice drop man. Feelin' all them damn multi's, that's the sure way to get some attention in my book, lol. Flow was pretty sweet aswell. It would be a lot more sick if you worked on it some more though.

Good work man!
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