Newest Song..Some punchlines (James R -Creativity! ha)

[Boston]

well. im somewhat trying something new, trying to be creative at some points (trying to do something James wanted me to try) i have 8 bars so far, and wanted yall honest opinion. you might complain about the structure, but trust me its fine, i have it flowing fine. itll be in the audio section when completely done. ill revise everything after, but the flow is there once again haha...anyways here..

between ( ) are the adlibs, which might change, just added :



i love it how you diss my shit/ (your wack)
then i drop my album;
you turn around n beg your parents to put it on your christmas list/ (pleeeeaseee)
or you go n rip it quick, i can almost picture it/ (yup)
tryna make a quick buck, your going out n flippin it/ (you must hear this!)
damn your on some other shit, dad shoulda used a rubber bitch/
or shoulda pulled his dick out n cummed between some other lips/ (open wide!)
i mean who the fuck is t-murph?/ (who?)
isnt that the fag josh dissed and ended up on a R.I.P T-shirt/

[gladimnotsoluble]

i love it how you diss my shit/ (your wack)
then i drop my album;
you turn around n beg your parents to put it on your christmas list/ (pleeeeaseee)
or you go n rip it quick, i can almost picture it/ (yup)
tryna make a quick buck, your going out n flippin it/ (you must hear this!)
damn your on some other shit, dad shoulda used a rubber bitch/
or shoulda pulled his dick out n cummed between some other lips/ (open wide!)
i mean who the fuck is t-murph?/ (who?)
isnt that the fag josh dissed and ended up on a R.I.P T-shirt/

this is some of the better creative writing i've seen, i dig

[Slim Zaddy]

wow man it's sick really ,, i mean it it's very decent.. nd i like your punchlines .. they are sweat .. so i wanna see this completed ,, then i wanna to see it recored .. but first complete it .. overall 9/10 .. keep droppin man ..

[James R.]

All I gotta say is: That's what the fuck I'm talkin about.

[Rain Matrix]

nice, better then anything I've seen from you recently

[Boston]

thanks james
and lol rain, i use to post in here a lot, but like 5 months ago, well maybe not that long, or that short i just completely forget..i smoked myself dumb.. but thanks anyways bro

[Steve Spag]

Pretty sick man, probably one of the better things I've read from you. I feel that some lines could be shortened a little bit, but if you got the flow for it, it's all good. Reminded me exactly of Royce Da 5'9"s flow on his track "T.O.D.A.Y."

Keep it up man!

[Boston]

haha thanks steve
i love royce btw,