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Steve Spag - Quick 8

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 27th, '08, 20:46

Havn't really had a whole lot of time to type up lyrics lately, but I wrote this for fun a couple nights ago. It's pretty simple to be honest with you, but I like the flow for it. Sometimes being simple is effective enough, lol. Anyways, here it is:

if i, were to die then was reborn as a bee//
i would sting all my enemies in a swarm by the beach//
yeah, i live a boring life and rap for a dream//
come on and clap, you can scream because i'm back on the scene//
i spit it faster and i'm fat with a p//
and an h instead of the f, because i've mastered this beat//
i see you asshole's and it's startin' to seem//
that ya'll are callin' me names 'cause you ain't smater than me//

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008

Leave Feedback Please :)

Oh, and I'm going to the studio tomorrow to feature on a new track. So that'll be up'd soon enough.
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Re: Steve Spag - Quick 8

Postby Boston » Dec 27th, '08, 21:19

its alright, nothing special
lol i dont know about the begining, reborn as a bee
i liked the wordplay at the end though.

good job
feed my new one please.. a few below - thanks
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Re: Steve Spag - Quick 8

Postby Requiem » Dec 27th, '08, 21:19

not bad, definitely not ur best. but for a quick keystyle it's pretty good.

first 4 lines were ur best of the 8 ;)
keep it up steve :)
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Re: Steve Spag - Quick 8

Postby Solace » Dec 27th, '08, 22:15

Yeah it was simple but i liked it, :y:
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Re: Steve Spag - Quick 8

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 27th, '08, 22:19

Thanks for the feed guys. I'm gonna finish it up when I have some time in the next couple days. Once it's all done I'll post the final product.

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