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Mad Keystyle

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 28th, '08, 03:29

I'll End Ya Flow Fast like inhaling Chemical Gas (aww!) so Cough N Choke, your Coffins Closed I'm Stopping Foes like a Brick Wall a white boy with Big Balls so just say it was His Fault I'll Take That Blame go on throw Hate At Rain like a Shoe at Bush I Knew ya Would (bitch) you better Do it Good I'll hit ya one time with a Verse Ender wiht rhymes hotter than the Earth's Center nah, your not even Worth Them Words you'll be finished if I see a Diss Appear I'll straight make the beef Disappear

sorry about the structure I was just going with it
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Re: Mad Keystyle

Postby James R. » Dec 28th, '08, 03:47

I like it a lot. The structure made it read like you were freestyling it so no complaints (and it was so short who really gives a shit anyways?). I like the last part with the diss appear/disappear. Good drop man.
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Re: Mad Keystyle

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 28th, '08, 06:33

yeah it was freestyle I was kinda mad so I went with it I should have went longer but the end set of rhymes I used tempted me to end it there
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Re: Mad Keystyle

Postby -[Zach]- » Dec 28th, '08, 08:57

i agree with James R. that diss appear/disappear line was really nice. as a whole it was very good. short and sweet.
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

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Re: Mad Keystyle

Postby <Stiiccy> » Dec 28th, '08, 10:27

nice shit dude :y:
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Re: Mad Keystyle

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 30th, '08, 05:11

great piece
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Mad Keystyle

Postby mcZu » Dec 30th, '08, 18:39

Kaotic wrote:great piece

Nuff said
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