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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby James R. » Dec 28th, '08, 20:53

I like the hook. The verse was sick man. Imagery and emotion galore. Creative writing at its finest. Dope son
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Dec 28th, '08, 21:10

verse was dope man :y:
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 28th, '08, 21:22

Hahaha, now THAT'S the shit I'm talking about man! Perfect verse, sick punchlines, awesome flow, wide vocab, and some nice word-play. Hook was pretty sick too, would deffinetly like to hear this recorded on a track, 'cause it screams "Single".

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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby Arabian Shady » Dec 28th, '08, 21:38

lmao that was hilarious man.
well delivered, structure was exllent, makes it so much easier to read, flow was wiked , multies and punches were super dope.
record that shit man, worth a single
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 28th, '08, 21:57

McMaybe wrote:Thanks man ^ I'm hoping i get a chance to record it this week. I might need someone to do a second verse.

I'll send ya' a verse I got that matches that later on today if you want, lol.
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 28th, '08, 22:37

this verse was damn good, wouldn't mind hearing it recorded
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby yoshi » Dec 29th, '08, 00:44

omg
i'm totally feelin it :8) got this dark and twisted vibe. reminds me a bit of Aspy's 'When The Stranger Calls' [which was one of Aspo's masterpieces btw], i got the same feel. wow.

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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby Xray » Dec 30th, '08, 01:27

Hahahahaha "I'm nice too, I like beach walks, candle lights and Ice Cube," LOL at that line. Dope shit man. :y:
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby The GameKeeper » Dec 30th, '08, 16:59

Damn bro... everytime I read something you wrote ,I shake my head and ask myself how the fuck does he come up with this shit??? Your wordplay is off the charts man...
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby mcZu » Dec 30th, '08, 18:43

Lmfao, sick shit funny yet genius at the same time :y:
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby <Stiiccy> » Dec 30th, '08, 18:56

mahaha incredible shit man...i love the hook...
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Re: Maybe's Basement.

Postby <Stiiccy> » Dec 30th, '08, 19:03

McMaybe wrote:
XXStiiCCyXX wrote:mahaha incredible shit man...i love the hook...



Thanks dude. We should do this verse for verse. Mine + Yours and just make it a track ^

iight that'll work...let's do it man...we can put it on the mixtape
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