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Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 2nd, '09, 14:23

it's a short vesre ,, i hope you will like it though

Stuck, Im Trying to Be Drunk so Droppa Buck..
Yell at the Sky, Just so My Shit-Talk is-Up..Fuck
My Clover's Outta Luck. Choice to Drink-Or-Not
Fam Or Brew. Tell Me What Kinda Man Are You?
With-Drawin Puke-in cant Live Wittout a Can-or-2
Beatin-ya Wife what I'm Speakin is Right, I Might..
Have Got you Finally Thinkin Tonight. But i Might
cause you To Drink-More While you Think More..
A women Who Loves Brew. Men Think - Whore..
Group Homes and Jail For a Human Addiction, Listen
alcohoism is Sickinin. But I'm Stuck. Did i Mention?.
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Ice_Scarred » Jan 3rd, '09, 06:25

Short and sweet. Pretty decent lines bro. 7.5/10
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 3rd, '09, 09:25

Ice_Scarred wrote:Short and sweet. Pretty decent lines bro. 7.5/10


thanks man for checkin it out ,, much appreciated .. :worship:
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby James R. » Jan 3rd, '09, 23:42

Quick question: why do you capitalize random words? I thought it was to show multies, but it seems kind of sporadic. And you leave words like 'I' lowercase. Just wondering.

Anyways it was a good drop. I like the concept of it. I thought the rhyming was good, although I've seen you rhyme at a much higher level. It got to the point though which I like. A lot of times something is written about a topic, but the topic is like an underlying issue instead of the focus. You focused on it pretty well. Good job man. I'd like to see a long piece, maybe a storytelling piece with this. 7.5/10
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 4th, '09, 16:12

James R. wrote:Quick question: why do you capitalize random words? I thought it was to show multies, but it seems kind of sporadic. And you leave words like 'I' lowercase. Just wondering.

Anyways it was a good drop. I like the concept of it. I thought the rhyming was good, although I've seen you rhyme at a much higher level. It got to the point though which I like. A lot of times something is written about a topic, but the topic is like an underlying issue instead of the focus. You focused on it pretty well. Good job man. I'd like to see a long piece, maybe a storytelling piece with this. 7.5/10


nah man it's not for showing multies or somethin ,, it just for changin style or writing in different approach , actually i dunno i just come up with it :D ... nd thanks man for checkin it out much appreciated james . you will get what you like .. your orders are to be done :8) .. anyway glad you liked it man .. i wanna see write a whole song as you did before .. so commin dont be lazy i want to see you around here .. :wave:
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 4th, '09, 16:13

McMaybe wrote:Pretty good. Rhymes well and the concept is pretty cool. :y:


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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Arabian Shady » Jan 5th, '09, 09:31

yo i like this 1 man, short and sweet but it had a different style, like you broke midway and contibued that at the next bar all the while keepin a story goin, pretty sick
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 6th, '09, 10:40

Arabian Shady wrote:yo i like this 1 man, short and sweet but it had a different style, like you broke midway and contibued that at the next bar all the while keepin a story goin, pretty sick
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thanks for checkn out Arabian Shady , glad you liked it bro ..
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby neb121 » Jan 7th, '09, 02:31

nice job :y:
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im cantankerous when i step to the mic
mean streaked and eat emcees when i write
-Bodacious-

I will never put down the mic

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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 7th, '09, 20:31

neb121 wrote:nice job :y:


thanks for checkn it up , much appreciated :worship:
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 8th, '09, 00:09

I liked it you had some real nice rhymes there
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Re: Alcoholic

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 9th, '09, 12:38

Rain Matrix wrote:I liked it you had some real nice rhymes there


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