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Practice again

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '09, 21:47

These words were written to excite those MC's who bite,
It's like rap is medieval and I am but a bright knight,
Slaying dragons in the night cause when I spit its like,
my vocal cords ignite as I recite my shit in spite,
The light in the darkness will never be revealed,
Those children with aids, scars will never be healed,
It feels unreal but that is just my current reality,
Small sights of hospitality, destroying my mentality,
Hurt because of abnormalities, suicidal thoughts in hand,
Pressured and beat, loss of respect and loss of land,
It wasnt even planned, no rights to stand,
Being commanded, not even I can understand.
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Re: Practice again

Postby Requiem » Jan 4th, '09, 22:17

yo that was sick as hell :o the rhymes were great, reminded me somewhat of limelight, but hey. doing multi-rhymes is always good for flow. i liked it man. especially that dragon slaying line. can't complain about it :y: strong ending too, that "even i can't understand."


u should so record that for the 3 knights collab 1 :8)
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Re: Practice again

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 4th, '09, 22:21

not bad! :y:
Last edited by Ka0t1c on Jan 5th, '09, 02:41, edited 1 time in total.
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Practice again

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '09, 22:24

Thanks both of you, i appreciate it :)
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Re: Practice again

Postby scalia5 » Jan 4th, '09, 23:09

wow nice man.
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Re: Practice again

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '09, 23:24

scalia5 wrote:wow nice man.

Thanksss :happy:
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Re: Practice again

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 5th, '09, 01:43

It's so great to see you post and improve! Now you gotta work on ya delivery and I may have a track planned for us. :y: :y:
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Re: Practice again

Postby Solace » Jan 5th, '09, 01:45

MC Anonymous wrote:It's so great to see you post and improve! Now you gotta work on ya delivery and I may have a track planned for us. :y: :y:

Thanks MC, :) Hopefully i can improve my delivery, itd be dope to get outshined by you on a track :D
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