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Freaking Out

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 6th, '09, 07:57

right now my life's so full of obstructions
and there's no more instructions on how to go forward n function
am i cornered, i don't know but it's horror, corruption has formed
i feel foreign, abducted for torture in some quarters; my dungeon

i'm alone but what for, was i born to forfeit my conscience?
cuz my wars are abundant, what's in store- distortion's amongst us
warriors, they're monsters transformin the youngsters to abnormal
who will warn them, encumbered by numbers comin to swarm in

and perform their production, destroyin construction, ignorin discussion
not explorin the pungent from absorbin the junctions of disorder, disruptin
our portal, they've auctioned the world's portrait cuz thoughts did pour in, they're tellin
them they're poor, that exhausted their morals too much then ornaments flourished
or's this assumption?

let's sort out the jumps then... (that means let's figure out why i'm freaking out)
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Freaking Out

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 6th, '09, 10:03

Kaotic wrote:
i'm alone but what for, was i born to forfeit my conscience?
cuz my wars are abundant, what's in store- distortion's amongst us
warriors, they're monsters transformin the youngsters to abnormal
who will warn them, encumbered by numbers comin to swarm in


i loved it man ,, it's dope .. lyrics and rhymes are sweet though .. these line are sick .. gd job here man .. waitin for you to do a full song ,,
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Re: Freaking Out

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 6th, '09, 10:15

thanx, i'm looking forward to makin full tracks too, i'll record but i can't yet even tho i should've been already, i just got one thing recorded and i messed up one part in it, otherwise i'd already have it posted.

when i get out the Army (Soon!) i'll be working on it since i'll have more time to focus on it...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Freaking Out

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 6th, '09, 10:38

Kaotic wrote:thanx, i'm looking forward to makin full tracks too, i'll record but i can't yet even tho i should've been already, i just got one thing recorded and i messed up one part in it, otherwise i'd already have it posted.

when i get out the Army (Soon!) i'll be working on it since i'll have more time to focus on it...


good news,, lookin forward to somethin from you.. gd luck dude ,,
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Re: Freaking Out

Postby Urban Punk » Jan 6th, '09, 13:26

Nice drop! I like the vocab and the topic was good too, keep it up bro you’ve got potential
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Re: Freaking Out

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 7th, '09, 01:53

oh yeah, music's my life
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Freaking Out

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 9th, '09, 21:00

Kaotic wrote:oh yeah, music's my life


good for you , it's a relief for me
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