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Love Won't

Postby Emadyville » Jan 7th, '09, 07:06

I had 2 songs on my mixtape and are on my myspace now called love will and love will 2 about a girl who fucked with my heart lol, so i was drinking tonight, and as i was dobering i thought maybe i should write a song called love won't, and be more positive, if i had a beat i woulda made a full song but this is what i came up with. Feedback is really needed on this. \

I did love will but now I have come to realize,
What love really is in my own real eyes,
Love sometimes blinds us and can kill guys,
And kill girls the same when we instill lies,
But to be honest will both sexes still try,
To find what love is or do we know that love won’t,
Be everything we dreamed and while some cope,
With the thought of a lost love and be dumb nope,
We should all know what love is before we run from hope,
Some believe in love at first sight and run to alope,
But remember not to ever jump the gun and sulk,
In your own mistakes, love has us blind some,
We are all just trying and searching to find one,
Who feels the same about when in all truth,
Love is right there in those that will call you,
Love is the melody we hear in all tunes,
Love is the dance we step to in the ballroom,
But love can blow up in our face like a balloon,
And have us looking for our shadow like its noon,
And right I’m sure you’re all wondering why I’m rappin this,
Maybe in your minds you’re all like what happened is,
He went insane cause I don’t understand is he trappin this,
Not at all I just realized love is really happiness,
Love is how you feel when that girl picks your smile up,
And makes you realize all the bullshit that’s piled up,
Isn’t really shit cause she’s there to have you wild nuts,
And make you smile just enough it’s been awhile shucks,
You needed this and you don’t understand why you feel this,
You wish you could bottle it up forever and seel this,
Off forever to have whenever you feel slighted,
When in truth it’s in the moment and that is real brightness,
Not to mention your friends that kept you sane when,
You got pissed at a party when your ex came in,
And you try to walk away realizing it’s the same when,
This test of life maybe is just a game to win,
We all feel love for those who makes us proud to be,
Who we are and for those who get the best out of me,
I am thankful cause you I hope you realize I love you to death,
I would take bullets for you cause you’re above the rest,
I could name names but you should know who you be,
I cannot be more real right now and I am truthfully,
Glad I was able to bring the happiness to light,
Cause when I record and I am grabbing this mic,
I will let the words shine true to those I respect,
Those I love and I will until I have no days left,
Cause you were who backed me and said do it kid,
That’s why when I’m gone those I love will let the music live…
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Re: Love Won't

Postby gutawafang » Jan 7th, '09, 08:18

that inspires me about LOVE cuz that word has no real exact meaning. no one can define love in a same way. but it moved me. :y:
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Re: Love Won't

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 7th, '09, 10:10

man it's very dope .. really it's sick ,, rhymes and lyrics are good over here , nd in this song i can feel the emotion's moving inside your lines, just go and recorded man , nd i will give a feedback once you finished .. gd job bro 9/10 :y:
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Re: Love Won't

Postby Emadyville » Jan 7th, '09, 19:02

Damn thank you both for the feed. I really neeeded it cause I didn't know if this was any good. I will record it in time, I need a beat, to rewrite some of this, and to make it longer, thanks a again :y:
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