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Letter To God (My Apologies)

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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby Dark Blue » Jan 11th, '09, 04:44

great job on the whole song but omfg i loved the 3rd verse :worship:
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby Dark Blue » Jan 11th, '09, 04:49

Scott Macdougall wrote:
shadybaby101 wrote:great job on the whole song but omfg i loved the 3rd verse :worship:


thanks man (: appreciated :flower:


your welcome but no joke the third verse brough tears to my eyes lol cause i was thinkin to myself like what would i do if that happend to one of my parents...anyways great job again lol
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 11th, '09, 05:04

This was very good...but the last verse....
:'( I actually shed a tear. You did very fuckin' good on this Scott,
much respect to you. :y: :worship:
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby <Stiiccy> » Jan 11th, '09, 05:19

nice drop...me likey :flower:
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 11th, '09, 05:22

Scott Macdougall wrote:
MC Anonymous wrote:This was very good...but the last verse....
:'( I actually shed a tear. You did very fuckin' good on this Scott,
much respect to you. :y: :worship:


really appreciate positive comments from people with huge talents like you :flower: thanks.

EDIT - you've really touched me with the niceness of your comment lol :flower: :'(

It's all good bro :y: :flower:
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby James R. » Jan 11th, '09, 05:32

god dammit MacDougal this was heart-wrenching and awesome. Good job making me depressed as hell lol. Seriously though. Great song.
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby Solace » Jan 11th, '09, 05:37

:'( Great drop man, and you know what? I read that after listening to Suicidal Thoughts by Biggie. Not a good combo. But seriously that was touching (no homo). Fucking raw shit. Sorry for your mother, my mom and sister had cancer when i was little, but they got through it. I hope all the best for your mom :console:
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby Slimm » Jan 12th, '09, 23:58

First time i read anything in here, the average multi/metaphore writing doesnt cut it for me. But this was a good ass job man, good luck with your mom. Must be hard as hell
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby mist15806 » Jan 13th, '09, 00:22

*sigh*....it was absolutely beautiful. when i read the third verse i swear something like tugged at my heart :'( hope your mom makes it through.
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby Arabian Shady » Jan 13th, '09, 06:37

that was very well written man, i dunno if you meant it to be that way, but it actually rapperd in s poetic way,it was absolutely sick man
first verse was ayte but you stepped it up a whole lot in the second and third verse,
i feel ya, i lost my aunt to cancer....i know exactly how the countdown gown :(
Good luck and a good job :y:
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Re: Letter To God (My Apologies)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 13th, '09, 10:35

wow , soory man for my late feed . anyway , i think this is pretty sick ,, really nice.. i like the emotions in it . it's really nice .. rhymes are great ,, actually a very good apology .. , how about writing something about love , becuase i think you're pretty good in this catagory , and i will be the first to give a feed on it .. you hve already done a one before,, it's was dope .. anyway , gd job here bro .. keep it up ..
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