NEW - Frustration

[Solace]

Not my best piece but I had to write something...

[Verse 1]
Walked to school yesterday, got beat and robbed,
The teachers don't care, all week they mock,
Always trapped up in my own anger and frustration,
In my own cuts, never getting my salvation,
I feel blood engulfing my entire mouth,
Small like a mouse, my fire has been doused,
I'm unknown to the present just like Robert Frost,
Sitting on my chair thinking of tomorrows loss,
Unimportant, a nuisance, kicked to the side,
A young teenager who's been hit when he tried,
Hit in his pride, no hope is inside, it's crazy,
The perfect vision for a boy like me is hazy,
And when I die I really hope that it is known,
My life's blanket was cold and I grew up without a home.

[Chorus]
It's like one of those types of games you can't beat,
It's like life is a test, but it's one you can't cheat,
It's a battlefield, a type that you cannot retreat,
Sometimes you gotta settle down and admit your defeat.

[Verse 2]
Frustration surrounds me, I'm in a choke hold,
My heart skips beating like mold flows,
Subject of told jokes, a cold old cloak,
Shitted on like I was a stick and they was bold oak,
See them in the halls giving me a sharp look,
Meaning I'll beat your ass this time with a hard book,
I ain't poor or diseased, but home ain't sanctuary,
Dead faces in my mind, they're just blankly scary,
Sweat down my back, all the hate I attract,
Tying to fit in but I guess friends are things I lack,
Pick up the courage, now winning is my urge,
Pen is the weapon and I fight with my words.


[Chorus]

[gutawafang]

Totally great for a 13.

[Solace]

Totally great for a 13.

Thanks

[Slim Zaddy]

i loved it bro .. i think it's pretty good . lyrics and rhymes were simple . but it flowed perfect to me .. and chorus was great too . i think it's cool .. and i love the concept too , good think to write about .. overl all it was a dope piece .. 8/10

[SajN]

Very nice.
I could relate to some of the lines you had, and I think hey were very great.
You had some good rhymes, and the flow seemed good to me.
Concept is great, I could actually see me rapping it


Love the concept. I actually wrote a concept like that when I was 13, but after 1st verse I just never finished it lol. It was very simple though, it didn't flow at all either, my 2nd song I ever tried to write.

[Solace]

was really good, I would love to hear it recorded

Thanks, i gotta lotta stuff to record atm but im busy with *other stuff* too. The next song of my own id record would be Dead Rose (if you remember, its that love one)

i loved it bro .. i think it's pretty good . lyrics and rhymes were simple . but it flowed perfect to me .. and chorus was great too . i think it's cool .. and i love the concept too , good think to write about .. overl all it was a dope piece .. 8/10

Thanks man, im glad you liked it.

Very nice.
I could relate to some of the lines you had, and I think hey were very great.
You had some good rhymes, and the flow seemed good to me.
Concept is great, I could actually see me rapping it


Love the concept. I actually wrote a concept like that when I was 13, but after 1st verse I just never finished it lol. It was very simple though, it didn't flow at all either, my 2nd song I ever tried to write.

Thanks for checking it out, and about your old piece. You ever post it here? I'd like to see how you were when you were beginning, so i know if im on the right track.

[Requiem]

^good piece man. especially the robert frost line. not ur best, but still really good
flow was kinda iffy, structure was there, and the rhymes were decent. can't complain too much. i don't know about recording, but u can definitely take ur best lines of the verses, and turn it into something

[Solace]

^good piece man. especially the robert frost line. not ur best, but still really good
flow was kinda iffy, structure was there, and the rhymes were decent. can't complain too much. i don't know about recording, but u can definitely take ur best lines of the verses, and turn it into something

Thanks man, glad you checked it. Yeah i should definitely do that, take the best lines. anyways thanks

[SajN]

Thanks for checking it out, and about your old piece. You ever post it here? I'd like to see how you were when you were beginning, so i know if im on the right track.

No, I don't have it here. I only have it jotted down on paper, but believe me, it sucked
If you wanna see it, tell me. And I'll PM you it.

[Ka0t1c]

good stuff, keep it up, u are a very good writer...and a person

[Solace]

Thanks for checking it out, and about your old piece. You ever post it here? I'd like to see how you were when you were beginning, so i know if im on the right track.

No, I don't have it here. I only have it jotted down on paper, but believe me, it sucked
If you wanna see it, tell me. And I'll PM you it.

Sure. itd be cool to read stuff from when you were younger.

good stuff, keep it up, u are a very good writer...and a person

thanks man