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Aww Shit. (Abstract shit)

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Re: Aww Shit. (Abstract shit)

Postby James R. » Jan 11th, '09, 19:20

Hahahahahah not your illest shit, but then again, I've never seen you write in this style. This shit was pretty funny and very clever throughout. It flowed well. With the right beat this could be a great single even. I love the rappers are to music what rock and roll is to break dance line. Very nice. Chorus was also good. I think this would be the PERFECT song to attract the drunken college kids to your shit and get them hooked enough to check you when they were sober and listen to your doper shit. Good job man.
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Re: Aww Shit. (Abstract shit)

Postby Steve Spag » Jan 11th, '09, 19:27

Hahaha, another classic drop. I love the wordplay on this one, the flow sounded sweet too the way I was reading it. The hook is really sick aswell, you always got that down good.

Solid piece man, would like to hear this recorded.
Check out my new drop "Sightless" when you get a chance.

Keep it up dude!
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Re: Aww Shit. (Abstract shit)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 12th, '09, 08:54

great drop homie , i liked it alot . it was funny and clever , lyrics were nice too beside the rhymes , i could flow with it in different ways , which is great, keep it comming bro .. 9/10 :y:
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Re: Aww Shit. (Abstract shit)

Postby Arabian Shady » Jan 14th, '09, 18:23

that was pretty dope Maybe, quite witty, intelligent lyrics, i like the flow on this 1, easy structure 2 read as well :y:
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Re: Aww Shit. (Abstract shit)

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 14th, '09, 18:24

Jewish God, nuff said.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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