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hated by some, loved by many

Postby shadyallday » Jan 14th, '09, 20:00

over the years iv'e met fans and i've faced haters/
i got a target on my chest, my life feels like Space Invaders/
some buy my records others just say it sucks/ if i stop rappin they would love that i gave it up/
all i wanna do is gain ur trust/ why dont i ever bump into lady luck/
u think im another Vanilla Ice/ according to the Bill of Rights, i can say what im feelin right?/
u can hate but u gotta realize that im killin mic's/ u gotta realize that im really nice/
just read my lips/ if u hate me dont say shit just plead the fifth/ just let me breathe then shit/
everybody got a different opinion/ some want me dead some dont mind if im livin/
this was the hand i was givin/ when i say i hate ya'll u know that im kiddin/
at times i just wanna break laws, i dont care if i go to prison/ will i pass or fail its gonna be a photo finish/ my flow is so distinguished, u know i wont diminish/
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Re: hated by some, loved by many

Postby Solace » Jan 15th, '09, 00:28

Seriously, fix that structure. I dont ever get why people write like that, how are they able to understand it?
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Re: hated by some, loved by many

Postby tjb » Jan 15th, '09, 01:53

bro i thought my flo was off fix it up an it will be alrite same with structure
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Re: hated by some, loved by many

Postby neversnooze » Jan 15th, '09, 04:59

well it was ok, i liked that bill of right line like they said fix up the structure
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Re: hated by some, loved by many

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 15th, '09, 18:31

actually it's a good verse , i liked it.. concept is good too . it will look better if you did as others here said .. anyway ,, gd drop .. here .. :y:
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